Advantages and Disadvantages of Phones

hi Thyxkris, here are my comments for your writing. Hopefully, you find them useful. best wish, It is evident that the use of mobile phones (or has both positive and negative impacts)/ brings us many problems as well as benefits, and thus there is an opinion that the demerits/disadvantages brought by a mobile phone prevail over the merits/advantages. Personally, I disagree with this view (ambiguous, i am not clear what view you disagree with, the first sentence should be separated into two small ones.).
On the one hand, a mobile phones poses have some negative effects for on its their users in several twoaspects. The first impact is in medical terms. firstly, a long-time use of mobile phones might be harmful for people’s health. It is inevitable that a mobile phone would create a certain level of radiation while being used. Much scientific research has pointed out that such amount of radiation would potentially lead to serious diseases, such as cancer and tumor. Thus a long-time use of mobile phones might harm one’s health. Another second problem often observed is how the inappropriate use of a mobile phone interferes with during people’s activities. For example, during an important conference, calling or receiving mobile phones during an important conference would distract audience's attention and impair(or decrease) the its quality of the conference.
On the other hand, using a mobile phone can bring about more many benefits. The principle benefit is how a mobile phone to increases the possibility and improves the quality of our contact. Nowadays, we can / or it is easy to make a phone call with our friends almost anywhere, such as in the subway, the countryside or even another countryies. Likewise moreover, we can also text send messages with beautiful photos or even high-quality video clips to share the exciting moment of in our life. Apart from that Besides, a mobile phone has also become an important entertainment equipment. By Using mobile, users can