An Analysis Of A Soldier's Death By Eger Allen Poe

When I was revising my flash fiction, I wanted to bring a little more of the Eger Allen Poe style of writing. To bring out my inner Poe, I used a lot of vivid words on how the killer was being killed “As he begins the long process of killing her, he takes delight in the whimpering pitiful sound she makes as he ties her up. With those big watery blue piercing eyes just like Abigail’s, are looking at him in utter terror, knowing she will never get out of his handing work, being at his mercy she is looking into her husband glazed over lifeless eye”(2). I like to think that I put a lot of detail into this little part of my story, and I leave a little hint that later on there for the readers about why he’s killing this one couple and not some other couple. As people say it’s all in the eyes.
I think Poe leaves his readers questing in some of his story, so I tried to bring that into my story buy make the readers not know the back history between the broken hearted killer and Abigale.
This is the extended of what to give the readers “The one that’s been on his mind for 25 years, the one that he didn’t expect her to be there that fateful night, which he remembers like it was yesterday” (1) “He’s back, the man who killed my parents is back” (3) I tried to leave this so that the readers know that he killed her parents but not really why he killed them.
I add in the piercing blue eyes to give some kind of connection between Abigail in the victims, because I felt like there was not a good connection between all the people in this story and why he was doing this to Abigail. This to me adds a little bit of a why he’s doing this “He can see her blue piercing eyes filled with terror, he smiles to himself, knowing he’s the one who put the terror in her eyes, just like he put the terror in her mother’s eyes”(4) This to me does add a why he’s doing this kind of factor but I still wanted that to be a little
vague.
I know in the comments some people didn't like my end because it leaves the reader hanging. I still leaves the readers hang but it gives the reader a little more of an ending and understand of why he doing everything that he just started to do and well I did name the story Just the Begging. I’m hoping the new end I put give the readers more of a satisfying ending, but, not I like the ending and I’m happy with it. “As he stands behind the yellow tape looking at the young detective Abigail. He can see her blue piercing eyes filled with terror, he smiles to himself, knowing he’s the one who put the terror in her eyes, just like he put the terror in her mother’s eyes.”(4) I think the new ending leaves the reader wondering about how it's going to turn out.
My goals for this story was to leave the readers wanting more, wanted to leave them wondering wither who going to win this battle of wits. I wanted to have my reader see the murders in their mind's eye, I think I painted an image for that to a happen. Even though the readers don’t know what the outcome of what is going to happen to Abigale I hoping she a charterer that people can root for to win
Putting all this into thought I’m hoping I reached my inner Eger Allen Poe. Poe just so happens to be one of my favorite authors and I’m glad I got to put his style of writing in to my own work I’m hoping I did him justice.