Attention Grabber: In The Midst Of Crisis

Two areas that I changed where my thesis I rewrote it in a way that better supports my essay, as well as making sure that my paragraphs all tied backed to the thesis with support by adding in examples and writing in a way that is easier to understand. I worked on writing more formally by writing in third person as well as working on rewording my essay with better supports. I think this helped my writing in that it all comes together in a more understanding way, the esay will be easier to read and better

Introduction
How does an individual's perspective of, and response to, a crisis define him or her?"
Attention Grabber: In the midst of crisis lies great opportunity

Introduce literature used: We Must Have Dreams, a speech by John Amagoalik
The way we cope in a crisis and continue on to dream and accept the obstacles in our path play a tremendous part in how we are defined.

Body
Body Paragraph 1

Main Idea: How a crisis can impact an individual and how it defines them as a person and the way they react to life’s obstacles.

Topic Sentence: A crisis is an emotionally disruptive experience that is challenging to get through; having the ability to cope will only impact people’s lives for the better.

Point 1 – Supporting evidence and details, including at least 1 or 2 quotations from each text

• We all have to deal with a crisis at some point in our lives and sometimes the obstacles are very overwhelming to get over, having the ability to move on and stay positive through these experiences will only better every individuals
Conclusion

Re-wording of Thesis: Crisis’s affect people all around us daily from someone losing their culture to turmoil in the plans of following their dreams. No matter what we are going through in our lives if we have the ability to perceive it in an improved way we are more likely to excel at life. Just as the man in “We Must Have Dreams” he stays positive throughout his issues and continues to try to make a change and believes he can.

Summary of Main Ideas: We all go through crisis’s they define who we are, and how we build our lives, we need dreams to continue on and to make our lives more successful but we also need to accept there will be predicaments along the way as we follow our dreams, and if we can stay positive along this journey it is sure to impact us in a much more elated way.

Generalization: How we handle our life issues defines us as the people we are and want to become.