Bartholomae's Essay 'White Shoes'
I. Major Essay #1
A. The following Essays are listed from least successful to most successful. The “White Shoes” paper; the “Clay Model” paper; the second “Jazz” essay; the first “Jazz” essay; and the “Composing Songs” essay.
II. The explanation and supportive reasoning why these papers are ranked the way they are. A. “White Shoes” paper 1. This student has misspelled some words and also did not use correct punctuation, causing some sentences to be run on sentences. 2. “They agreed that it did look better and they changed there combination to go along with mine.” (Bartholomae 150) B. “Clay Model” paper 1.This student was trying to write at a higher level of intelligence than what the student was capable of. 2.
“He is trying on the discourse even though he doesn’t have the knowledge that would make the discourse more than a routine.” (Bartholomae 136) C. “Jazz 2” essay 1. This student has misspelled words and used incorrect punctuation. 2. “Throughout the years, I have seen and heard many jazz players, both proffessional and amateur.” (Bartholomae 151) D. “Jazz 1” essay 1. This student explains what creativity means to them. “Creativity to me, means being free to express yourself in a that is unique to you, not having to conform to certain rules and guidelines.” (Bartholomae 148) 2. “Notice also that the writer of the “Jazz” paper locates himself and his experience in relation to the commonplace (creativity is a unique expression; is it not having to conform to rules or guidelines) regardless of whether the commonplace is true or not” (Bartholomae 149) E. “Composing Songs” essay 1. The student admits that she was never truly creative, however taking the song and making it her own is being creative in a sense. 2. “In a more fitting sense, however, I was being creative.” (Bartholomae 154)
III. Conclusion A. Each of these five students managed to get down on paper what their image of being creative meant. Some of the students wrote better than others, as what would happen in any group of people.
A. The following Essays are listed from least successful to most successful. The “White Shoes” paper; the “Clay Model” paper; the second “Jazz” essay; the first “Jazz” essay; and the “Composing Songs” essay.
II. The explanation and supportive reasoning why these papers are ranked the way they are. A. “White Shoes” paper 1. This student has misspelled some words and also did not use correct punctuation, causing some sentences to be run on sentences. 2. “They agreed that it did look better and they changed there combination to go along with mine.” (Bartholomae 150) B. “Clay Model” paper 1.This student was trying to write at a higher level of intelligence than what the student was capable of. 2.
“He is trying on the discourse even though he doesn’t have the knowledge that would make the discourse more than a routine.” (Bartholomae 136) C. “Jazz 2” essay 1. This student has misspelled words and used incorrect punctuation. 2. “Throughout the years, I have seen and heard many jazz players, both proffessional and amateur.” (Bartholomae 151) D. “Jazz 1” essay 1. This student explains what creativity means to them. “Creativity to me, means being free to express yourself in a that is unique to you, not having to conform to certain rules and guidelines.” (Bartholomae 148) 2. “Notice also that the writer of the “Jazz” paper locates himself and his experience in relation to the commonplace (creativity is a unique expression; is it not having to conform to rules or guidelines) regardless of whether the commonplace is true or not” (Bartholomae 149) E. “Composing Songs” essay 1. The student admits that she was never truly creative, however taking the song and making it her own is being creative in a sense. 2. “In a more fitting sense, however, I was being creative.” (Bartholomae 154)
III. Conclusion A. Each of these five students managed to get down on paper what their image of being creative meant. Some of the students wrote better than others, as what would happen in any group of people.