Choosing A Girl Suffering From Anorexia Nervosa

After the class’s exercises on point of view, I was intrigued by the idea of picking an unexpected narrator. I enjoyed writing the piece from the illness’s perspective as well, so I tried to put both things together when starting out on this assignment.
What would be effective in having objects describe a girl suffering from anorexia was that they would simply hint at it through small details, somehow correlated to their relationship with her, and never explicitly state what the problem was. As observed in class, it also works as a metaphor for the growing concern one starts to receive when suffering from this disease; each object has a different reaction and a different way of dealing with the girl’s behaviour.
Macro-editing-wise, the first draft dragged on for too long before it became clear what it was about.
The shoes had to hint to anorexia, so I added the mention of crop tops and skirts not being used
The objects had to have different voices but bleed well into one another. Putting the time of the day before each paragraph allowed me to clarify that the piece is following the same person throughout and that all objects are part of her morning routine. I also had to change some pronouns in the last paragraph so that it became easily understandable that the speaking voice belonged to the bus itself and not to a passenger. I believe the choice of having them refer to her directly conveys a sense of intimacy that would have otherwise been lost.
The piece ends on a poignant bittersweet note: contrary to the previous paragraphs, which confronted the present situation with the past, the last one hints at the future. There is therefore room left for hope, but the reader is aware of the state of the situation.
The metaphor then has worked as a means to explore the dynamics surrounding anorexia and to convey an idea of the impact it has not only on the person who suffers from it but on all those around her as