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Task: Write a critical essay, 600 words long, analyzing all aspects involved and discussed in FLIGHT by Doris Lessing.
Word count: 897 Textual evidence: 133 Percentage of quotation: < 20%
Love is one of the most powerful emotions that will usually exist when everything else has gone. Therefore, it is really miserable when you have to let go of the one you love.

In the short story “Flight” by Doris Lessing, we see how much the granddad loves his granddaughter, and how he does not want to give her up to someone else. This love comes to the granddad with a lot of conflicts, he wants to keep his granddaughter, but in on the other hand, he has to learn and accept to of letting let go of his granddaughter as for a circle of life to come full. “Flight” was published in 1957, in a collection of short stories entitled The Habit of Loving.

Throughout the story, all of the characters have their proper names - Alice, Lucy, Steven - except for one person, the main character: the old man. He is anonymous from the beginning to the end. Doris Lessing lets the main character go nameless in order to show that what happens to this character could happen to anyone. Moreover, the old man seems to be a symbol of the old generation who always wants to keep their children in their way.
At the beginning of the story, we see the old man loves pigeons. He calls them homing pigeons because of their excellent natural instinct, meaning they are always able to find their way home back even far away from home hundreds of miles. One of them is his favorite pigeons is which he depicts depicted as “a young plump-bodied bird” which and he often plays with by affectionately calling it “Pretty, pretty, pretty”. It is without doubt to say that his favorite pigeon is an embodiment of his granddaughter – Alice.

From this symbolic comparison comparative image, the old man seems to say how beautiful his Alice is, how much he loves her, and how hopeful his daughter can be like the homing pigeons - always knows the way home back to him, always be with him, and never leaves him alone.
The old man may be still happy if he did does not see his granddaughter “swinging on the gate” and “She was gazing past the pink flowers, past the railway cottage where they lived, along the road to the village”. His mood suddenly changes because he surely knows what his granddaughter is doing at the gate , ; she is waiting for her boyfriend, Steven, the postman’s son. She is eighteen years old and going to get married. The old man does not like it. He is fearful of loosing losing his last granddaughter. As a result, Seeing seeing Alice near the gate brings him a chilly feeling because, in his anticipation, the gate seems like a transition between home and the outside world, childhood and maturity. It will take Alice out of his home, out of his control, into enter a new world and without a slightest notion of never return reunion. He wants to keep Alice for himself and, as a precaution, avoids prevents her from not being ending up like her three other sisters who got married and then “transformed inside a few months from charming petulant spoiled children into serious young matrons”. That is why he shouts at Alice angrily “Waiting for Steven, hey ?”, then “Think you want to leave home, hey ?. Think you can go running around the fields at night ?”, and finally “I’ll tell your mom”. Pent-up emotional frustration is now all the more visible and about to explode into physical [?] And we can see “his fingers curling like claws into his palm”. [???], making him This point describes him as a wild and ferocious pigeon as though it is fighting for survival when threatened. Similarly, on the brink of looming loneliness,, he resorts to his ultimate right as a protective granddad to becomes aggressively to intervene into his granddaughter’s love affair in order to keep Alice always be with him.

The story goes on with the fact that the old man cannot keep Alice. She loves Steven and will marry him next month. “There’s no reason to wait” as his daughter said. This comes to the old man that “He would be left, uncherished and alone”. But as an unexpected wish, Steven comes and gives him a young pigeon because he knows the old man loves pigeons so much. They give him a pigeon which also means they give him a gift of love and respect. Moreover, they are also giving him a reassurance that they are sympathetic with him about the loneliness he has to suffer, and their promise to stay with him. The old man finally realizes that he cannot keep his beloved granddaughter forever. Comforted by the gift of another young pigeon, “he shut it in a box and took out of his favorite”, and sets his favorite free to fly in a symbolic gesture that proves his painful acceptance of the fact that he must allow Alice the freedom to grow into maturity.

At the end of the story, Alice “was staring at him. She did not smile. She was wide-eyed, and pale in the cold shadow, and he saw the tears run shivering off her face”. She cries when she sees her granddad release his favorite pigeon. She knows his action means he loves her so much and , he accepts loosing to let go of his favorite granddaughter in order for her to be happy with her new life. [And more, we do not know if those are tears of joy or sadness or some other feelings.: What does your argument imply, or involve, or suggest? anh/chi can giai thich ro hon diem nay. Day la mot trong nhung phan quant lot ta cam suc cua nhat vat trong cua cau truyen.]
The story ended ends with ambiguous conclusion through the tears on Alice’s face. Those tears can be for anyone in the story depending on the readers’ feeling. Mac du la nhu vay, nhung theo Cuong, anh/chi nen cung co va khang dinh phan lon day la nuoc mat rung dong nghen ngao cua Alice nhu vay de them nhan manh bat ky ai du co cung ran, ban linh, cuong quyet den duong nao, cung co luc roi cung phai suy nghi, xem xet lai cung cach minh da doi xu voi gia dinh, voi nguoi khac. Cung can hieu rang khoc la mot ban nang tu nhien cua con nguoi, khoc vi dau don so hai, khoc vi vui suong. Vi vay Alice cung khong la mot ngoai le. Co be khoc de xin duoc tha thu,, de xin ong Cu hieu cho noi long cua co be. Alice khoc cung vi so hai phai bo di cai minh von da rat yeu thuong, so phai danh mat gia dinh, so phai danh mat di qua khu….. Cuong mong muon ket luan nay phai sac ben hon nua..
Moreover, throughout the story, we have learned that we must let go of what we cannot change and how to accept the reality in order to move on with life. Ending an essay with a reflection reiterating the essay’s thesis is always appropriate, but it does tell us about your stance/point of view, however it seems you hastily stop short of its larger meaning, its larger implication. A strong conclusion can be more than one paragraph and should always leave a real lingering impact on readers. A conclusion is your last chance to wrap up the whole essay persuasively and succinctly. So you might want to reword your conclusion to make your stance stronger.
ASSESSMENT
STRENGTHS:
You quote correct and concise textual evidence. You quote only what you use. It’s not overcrowded.
You use your own words to introduce quotations and integrate them to paragraphs smoothly.
Your quotations do fit into your arguments and ideas.
You have good command of grammar. Note that spelling and punctuation mistakes are signs of negligence. In your essay, some words (loose/lose) are still misspelled. So, do avoid spelling errors.
You have clear strategy in organizing arguments and analyses and know how to sequence the flow of your ideas: one paragraph followed by one or two supporting arguments. This is good planning.
You do show good understanding of source text (source story) and literary device used by Lessing.
Your essay does contain thesis statement at the start and you do reiterate the essay’s thesis in closing part.
WEAKNESSES
Sentence styles should be improved further.
Arguments and analyses are not strong and persuasive enough. Stance and point of view are presented narrowly.
Closing part should create a lasting and lingering impact on readers by strongly and effectively reiterating the thesis of the essay as a way to wrap it up and remind readers of its implication, its message in a larger theme.
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Good thesis statement of the essay

Plot summary at a glance in introduction part is always good in equipping general readers with necessary condensed information of the story.

Demonstrate good analytical ability in explaining about the universal purpose of literary device Lessing has opted to give name to characters.

Controlling ideas are coherently developed, but argument and analysis is too simple and narrow although intention to explain things is averagely achieved.

Demonstrate proper usage of English and control of grammar.

Variety of sentence styles should be more resourcefully and creatively exploited in order for sentence naturally integrate into paragraph to achieve full effect of coherence between textual evidence and supporting ideas.

BUT philosophical aspect of this conclusive explanation should be further developed socially in terms of family relationship. This explanation is still simply and narrowly approached.

Cuong mong muon anh/chi cho biet ro hon how painful is he? Anh/chi nen mo rong ra them ben ngoai cuoc song doi thuong mot chut nua de nguoi doc co the cam nhan duoc noi dau nay nhu the nao…

Cuong mong muon anh/chi phan tich nhieu hon nua ve noi tam lo lang cua ong Cu. Nhu vay moi hieu het duoc suy nghi cua ba me minh, cua ong ba minh bat ke loi suy nghi do la nhu the nao. Thong diep cau truyen nay khong chi dung o do, ma Lessing con nhu muon ta suy ngam nhieu hon ve cuoc doi nay.
Mot bai essay sau sac phai can dau tu rat nhieu thoi gian, can dau tu ca ly tri lan trai tim moi mong thuyet phuc duoc nguoi doc.

Demonstrate good employment of textual evidence: short, succinct and effective, surely creating certain impact on readers about patterns of imagery and symbolism characteristic of pigeon and Alice.