Engl 150 Evaluation1
Yanxi Mo
ENGL-150
Jan. 24, 2015
Evaluation Essay
Evaluation Essay of “In Too Deep” The essay “In Too Deep” written by Tom Ruprecht was structured similarly as most autobiography essays, and the author’s narrative has conformed to the “Dramatic Arc”. I am evaluating the essay in “Dramatic Arc” order and …标题 place people。The writer changed his mind and gained a lot through this travel.
At the very beginning, the writer of the essay Tom explained the background of the story: the inciting incident happened on the group trip to Hawaii. Tom used a special technique to arouse the audience’s curiosity: there are two negative phrases “impossible” and “instead of” in the beginning of the essay. Also, Tom repeated several times “kindergartners” and “uncool” to express the feelings of unhappiness of being treated like a child and felt hostile towards the guide, which has a strong contrast to the feeling of satisfaction with the “little kindergartner” in the end of the essay. When describing the guide, Tom also compared the guide with himself: a “rugged and handsome” guide vs. a “kindergartner”. His wife was in the tour group too, so Tom thought he lost face. Droven by those complex emotions, Tom asked to get into the cave although he was not interested in it at all at first. At this time, the spelunker Ernie appeared in the story. Through the phrase “I politely declined, he insisted” implied the frustrating and unpleasant dialogues in the paragraphs that followed. In addition, Tom mentioned that it was his father’s story and words that encouraged him to agree the proposal. We can see that his father has a great influence on him. 加 indicate name comparison等形式化东西进去
Then move to the “Rising” part of the “Dramatic Arc”. Tom and Ernie entered into the cave. Tom added a lot of action verbs to show the big difference between them. On the one hand, Tom “began” to ask to head back, on the other hand, Ernie just “simply rushed ahead”. “Slither through”, “panicked”, and “began looking
ENGL-150
Jan. 24, 2015
Evaluation Essay
Evaluation Essay of “In Too Deep” The essay “In Too Deep” written by Tom Ruprecht was structured similarly as most autobiography essays, and the author’s narrative has conformed to the “Dramatic Arc”. I am evaluating the essay in “Dramatic Arc” order and …标题 place people。The writer changed his mind and gained a lot through this travel.
At the very beginning, the writer of the essay Tom explained the background of the story: the inciting incident happened on the group trip to Hawaii. Tom used a special technique to arouse the audience’s curiosity: there are two negative phrases “impossible” and “instead of” in the beginning of the essay. Also, Tom repeated several times “kindergartners” and “uncool” to express the feelings of unhappiness of being treated like a child and felt hostile towards the guide, which has a strong contrast to the feeling of satisfaction with the “little kindergartner” in the end of the essay. When describing the guide, Tom also compared the guide with himself: a “rugged and handsome” guide vs. a “kindergartner”. His wife was in the tour group too, so Tom thought he lost face. Droven by those complex emotions, Tom asked to get into the cave although he was not interested in it at all at first. At this time, the spelunker Ernie appeared in the story. Through the phrase “I politely declined, he insisted” implied the frustrating and unpleasant dialogues in the paragraphs that followed. In addition, Tom mentioned that it was his father’s story and words that encouraged him to agree the proposal. We can see that his father has a great influence on him. 加 indicate name comparison等形式化东西进去
Then move to the “Rising” part of the “Dramatic Arc”. Tom and Ernie entered into the cave. Tom added a lot of action verbs to show the big difference between them. On the one hand, Tom “began” to ask to head back, on the other hand, Ernie just “simply rushed ahead”. “Slither through”, “panicked”, and “began looking