and those fragment of the past makes him cherish the the innocence of childhood and fear the inevitable choice of growing up. I felt like my first body paragraph that talks about Allie was decent, but I felt like I could have improve upon it a little bit more. I was struggle with the second body paragraph. That paragraph talks about Jane and her relationship with Holden. I know about the situation between Holden and Jane, but I just didn’t know how to put it down in words. I manage to finish the paragraph, but I didn’t make a good distinction of how Jane is different compared to other girls like Sally Hayes. If I were to go back and add more to this paragraph, I would included a description of how Jane is important to Holden. After finishing my second body paragraph, I ended my essay with a simple conclusion as I didn’t have enough time to think up a third paragraph. I wish I could have added more to this essay as the Catcher in the Rye is like the book that I really feel a connection with. But either way, I did my best on this essay.
and those fragment of the past makes him cherish the the innocence of childhood and fear the inevitable choice of growing up. I felt like my first body paragraph that talks about Allie was decent, but I felt like I could have improve upon it a little bit more. I was struggle with the second body paragraph. That paragraph talks about Jane and her relationship with Holden. I know about the situation between Holden and Jane, but I just didn’t know how to put it down in words. I manage to finish the paragraph, but I didn’t make a good distinction of how Jane is different compared to other girls like Sally Hayes. If I were to go back and add more to this paragraph, I would included a description of how Jane is important to Holden. After finishing my second body paragraph, I ended my essay with a simple conclusion as I didn’t have enough time to think up a third paragraph. I wish I could have added more to this essay as the Catcher in the Rye is like the book that I really feel a connection with. But either way, I did my best on this essay.