Cited: Freeman, Hadley. "Sexual abuse of models." 8 September 2010. The Guardian. 1 March 2013 <http://www.guardian.co.uk/commentisfree/2009/sep/09/hadley-freeman-sexual-abuse-models>. Krupnick, Ellie. "Model Alliance Working To Pass The Freelancer Payment Protection Act." 25 March 2012. Huffington Post: Style. 1 March 2013 <http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2012/03/25/model-alliance-freelancer-payment-protection-act_n_1378111.html>. Lepore, Meredith. "Kate Moss Could Have Used A Better Union When She Started Her Modeling Career." 1 November 2012. The Grindstone. 1 March 2013 <http://www.thegrindstone.com/2012/11/01/career-management/kate-moss-exploited-as-young-model-180/>. Minsberg, Talya. "What the U.S. Can—and Can 't—Learn From Israel 's Ban on Ultra-Thin Models." 9 May 2012. The Atlantic. 5 March 2013 <http://www.theatlantic.com/international/archive/2012/05/what-the-us-can-and-cant-learn-from-israels-ban-on-ultra-thin-models/256891/>. Picture Me. Dirs. Ole Schell and Sara Ziff. Perf. Sara Ziff. 2009. The Model Alliance. 2013. 1 March 2013 <http://modelalliance.org/>. Writer’s Compendium #11 My Topic is on the abuse and exploitation of young aspiring models in the fashion industry. I came across this topic by accident. I had read an article on a website about how women and some men in the model business are overworked and abused everywhere. I liked how my topic addresses issues of a certain group of people in society which are supposed to be role models of fashion. One of the main challenges I faced when revising the essay was figuring out where to expand the content. Another challenge I faced was writing the introduction paragraph. The most helpful feedback I received was to narrow down my topic to a certain area in the world or a certain country. I narrowed it down to the United States. I believe that my current draft is actually very strong and I find that I did better in this essay than my previous one. I could still improve how I organize the essay – I could also expand more on the psychological issues in the fashion industry.
Cited: Freeman, Hadley. "Sexual abuse of models." 8 September 2010. The Guardian. 1 March 2013 <http://www.guardian.co.uk/commentisfree/2009/sep/09/hadley-freeman-sexual-abuse-models>. Krupnick, Ellie. "Model Alliance Working To Pass The Freelancer Payment Protection Act." 25 March 2012. Huffington Post: Style. 1 March 2013 <http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2012/03/25/model-alliance-freelancer-payment-protection-act_n_1378111.html>. Lepore, Meredith. "Kate Moss Could Have Used A Better Union When She Started Her Modeling Career." 1 November 2012. The Grindstone. 1 March 2013 <http://www.thegrindstone.com/2012/11/01/career-management/kate-moss-exploited-as-young-model-180/>. Minsberg, Talya. "What the U.S. Can—and Can 't—Learn From Israel 's Ban on Ultra-Thin Models." 9 May 2012. The Atlantic. 5 March 2013 <http://www.theatlantic.com/international/archive/2012/05/what-the-us-can-and-cant-learn-from-israels-ban-on-ultra-thin-models/256891/>. Picture Me. Dirs. Ole Schell and Sara Ziff. Perf. Sara Ziff. 2009. The Model Alliance. 2013. 1 March 2013 <http://modelalliance.org/>. Writer’s Compendium #11 My Topic is on the abuse and exploitation of young aspiring models in the fashion industry. I came across this topic by accident. I had read an article on a website about how women and some men in the model business are overworked and abused everywhere. I liked how my topic addresses issues of a certain group of people in society which are supposed to be role models of fashion. One of the main challenges I faced when revising the essay was figuring out where to expand the content. Another challenge I faced was writing the introduction paragraph. The most helpful feedback I received was to narrow down my topic to a certain area in the world or a certain country. I narrowed it down to the United States. I believe that my current draft is actually very strong and I find that I did better in this essay than my previous one. I could still improve how I organize the essay – I could also expand more on the psychological issues in the fashion industry.