Frankenstein Essay Revision Analysis
I decided to exhibit my revision skills on Paper II: Frankenstein Critical Essay, which highlight my efforts to strengthen the introduction and thesis sentence. I think the introduction is the most important part of the essay—it’s your first impression! The Frankenstein essay not only needed to grasp the reader’s attention but also clearly state my critical argument. I chose to highlight my revision for the Frankenstein essay specifically because my revisions in the introduction aided in developing an analysis of the female characters in Frankenstein. Through the revision process I was able to think critically and recognize the difference between opinion and evidence as well as formulate an intelligent, challenging thesis. In the first draft
of Paper II my introduction is a bit lengthy and contains run-ons. Through the process of revision, I paid close attention to coherence and areas where my assertions were lost due to wordiness. Although my writing process for Frankenstein was lengthy, the most dramatic change did not occur until Draft 4. In the fifth draft I decided to really focus on Mary Shelly’s favored patriarchal social system in Frankenstein. By narrowing my ideas to this topic, I was able to describe Shelley’s depiction of women’s social status as well as the stereotypical duties associated with the female characters. By refocusing my argument, I was able to not only develop an introduction that was controlled but also formulate a challenging thesis. I think the final draft of the introduction, particularly the thesis, moved from arguing women’s inessential role in society to focusing on the characteristics of the patriarchal system and the death of Elizabeth and Caroline.
of Paper II my introduction is a bit lengthy and contains run-ons. Through the process of revision, I paid close attention to coherence and areas where my assertions were lost due to wordiness. Although my writing process for Frankenstein was lengthy, the most dramatic change did not occur until Draft 4. In the fifth draft I decided to really focus on Mary Shelly’s favored patriarchal social system in Frankenstein. By narrowing my ideas to this topic, I was able to describe Shelley’s depiction of women’s social status as well as the stereotypical duties associated with the female characters. By refocusing my argument, I was able to not only develop an introduction that was controlled but also formulate a challenging thesis. I think the final draft of the introduction, particularly the thesis, moved from arguing women’s inessential role in society to focusing on the characteristics of the patriarchal system and the death of Elizabeth and Caroline.