Ghettis Reconsider As A Crime Thriller
ONE IN THE CHAMBER is an intriguing crime thriller. It reminds one of the classic and critically acclaimed film THE USUAL SUSPECTS. There are several similarities, including he structure and an ending twist that the audience doesn’t see coming. There are solid themes about revenge, redemption, and fate.
There’s truly a lot to really admire about this script, especially the ending twist that it was all just a ruse to get to Ghettis. However, like THE USUAL SUSPECTS, the plot and structure feel convoluted and extremely challenging to follow. Thus, it would really benefit the script to clarify events and reconsider the structure.
The current opening begins with Mias being caught by Ghettis. However, it might be more effective to open with …show more content…
First, it’s either not clear why Ghettis ordered the hit on Edward, and/or it’s lost in the plot. Also, if they know that Ghettis ordered the hit, why do they create such an elaborate ruse? It doesn’t feel like they get a confession from Ghettis. Thus, the entire motivation for Mias’ actions never feels fully understood. If it’s to get a confession, then craft the structure around this.
Adding to the complexity is the structure using flashbacks. There are flashbacks within flashbacks. This worked in THE USUAL SUSPECTS, although for the most part, the plot was confusing. However, in that film the goal to figure out the mysterious boss, which is made clear. It’s not so clear what either Ghettis is trying to do or what Mias is trying to do.
In addition, Mias doesn’t feel like he’s always driving the plot. For example, the most confusing flashback involves Anthony and the gun. It’s difficult to understand what Kayla, Panic, Kitten and the others are doing. It has something to do with a heist and perhaps bitcoins, but it’s just too challenging to fully follow. Moreover, Mias is missing throughout most of this sequence. The sequence begins around page 20 and Mias goes missing until page 45. That’s much too
There’s truly a lot to really admire about this script, especially the ending twist that it was all just a ruse to get to Ghettis. However, like THE USUAL SUSPECTS, the plot and structure feel convoluted and extremely challenging to follow. Thus, it would really benefit the script to clarify events and reconsider the structure.
The current opening begins with Mias being caught by Ghettis. However, it might be more effective to open with …show more content…
First, it’s either not clear why Ghettis ordered the hit on Edward, and/or it’s lost in the plot. Also, if they know that Ghettis ordered the hit, why do they create such an elaborate ruse? It doesn’t feel like they get a confession from Ghettis. Thus, the entire motivation for Mias’ actions never feels fully understood. If it’s to get a confession, then craft the structure around this.
Adding to the complexity is the structure using flashbacks. There are flashbacks within flashbacks. This worked in THE USUAL SUSPECTS, although for the most part, the plot was confusing. However, in that film the goal to figure out the mysterious boss, which is made clear. It’s not so clear what either Ghettis is trying to do or what Mias is trying to do.
In addition, Mias doesn’t feel like he’s always driving the plot. For example, the most confusing flashback involves Anthony and the gun. It’s difficult to understand what Kayla, Panic, Kitten and the others are doing. It has something to do with a heist and perhaps bitcoins, but it’s just too challenging to fully follow. Moreover, Mias is missing throughout most of this sequence. The sequence begins around page 20 and Mias goes missing until page 45. That’s much too