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I know that I am not good at English grammar so I can't edit your essay. But I can give you some feedback about your essay.
You wrote "they do not realize that living at home has more benefits compared to living away from home." it's kind of offense to people who choose living away from home and I think it's better you do not decide which kind of living style is better than other because it depends on the personality and needs of people. I think it's better to compare two kind of living style without making any choice.
So you can write about how living at home with family members has a significant role on improvement of qualities such as respecting other people ideas and choices, teamwork skills and so on.
Write a comparison/contrast essay about Living at home and living away from home.
This is my essay, I hope you can give me some feedback.Thanks.
Most Young people think about living away from home as the best part in their lives because they will have more freedom and that can be really exciting for them; however, they do not realize that living at home has more benefits compared to living away from home.
The best thing about living away from home is that you have more freedom. You can set your own rules, stay up late, invite friends to your place and have parties whenever you want; hence, a parent- free environment is awesome, but you need to be mature enough to handle it. A drawback is that you may feel homesick. You may miss the moments that you used to share with your family, or even those familiar things such as your neighborhood, your bedroom, your pet and so on. A study in Neuropsychiatry states that people get higher mental health scores if they lived in their family home. Another disadvantage is that you will have to pay a rent, pay the bills, and buy your own food which will definitely affect you in the financial aspect. Finally, another aspect is convenience. You will not have many of the things that you used to have at home. You
I know that I am not good at English grammar so I can't edit your essay. But I can give you some feedback about your essay.
You wrote "they do not realize that living at home has more benefits compared to living away from home." it's kind of offense to people who choose living away from home and I think it's better you do not decide which kind of living style is better than other because it depends on the personality and needs of people. I think it's better to compare two kind of living style without making any choice.
So you can write about how living at home with family members has a significant role on improvement of qualities such as respecting other people ideas and choices, teamwork skills and so on.
Write a comparison/contrast essay about Living at home and living away from home.
This is my essay, I hope you can give me some feedback.Thanks.
Most Young people think about living away from home as the best part in their lives because they will have more freedom and that can be really exciting for them; however, they do not realize that living at home has more benefits compared to living away from home.
The best thing about living away from home is that you have more freedom. You can set your own rules, stay up late, invite friends to your place and have parties whenever you want; hence, a parent- free environment is awesome, but you need to be mature enough to handle it. A drawback is that you may feel homesick. You may miss the moments that you used to share with your family, or even those familiar things such as your neighborhood, your bedroom, your pet and so on. A study in Neuropsychiatry states that people get higher mental health scores if they lived in their family home. Another disadvantage is that you will have to pay a rent, pay the bills, and buy your own food which will definitely affect you in the financial aspect. Finally, another aspect is convenience. You will not have many of the things that you used to have at home. You