Use the following rubric to analyze the language analysis paragraphs in response to
Rodriguez’s narrative. Be certain that you can discuss each paragraph element described in the rubric for each response.
1.
(optional) The writer provides an anecdote, allusion, quotation, statistic, or other device to introduce the essay and/or capture reader interest.
2.
The writer constructs an effective topic sentence.
a. The writer highlights a critical rhetorical feature that is essential to the passage’s effectiveness.
b. The writer effectively conveys the passage’s theme.
3.
The writer assertively explains the use of figurative language/rhetorical features in the passage.
a. The writer does not use adverbs such as “probably” or weak verbs to refer to the author and/or his or her work or message such as “may have been thinking” or “may be trying to convey.”
4.
The writer analyzes how the use of figurative language/rhetorical features enhances the meaning of the text.
a. The writer links his or her analysis back to the idea(s) presented in the topic sentence.
5.
The writer has a conclusive sentence and/or idea at the end of the paragraph. 6.
The writer uses a well-constructed and interesting sentence structure to convey his or her message.
7.
The writer has few to no errors in grammar, usage, or mechanics
(GUM).
Language
Analysis
Paragraph
Rubric
Rodriguez and Tone
1.
Rodriguez uses crestfallen alliteration and heartsore dialect to illustrate the sadness and pitty he feels for his mother. In this way Rodriguez sets the tone of silent whispers and hushed questions. When talking about his mother, and his past, Rodriguez, exemplifies this when he uses the shushed alliteration of the soft "s" sound. When he states that "she seems, all of a sudden, very small", it doesn't seem like a statement to be said out loud. The "s" sounds make it seem like a whisper in the wind of something sad and