Making a Difference
There was an old advertising slogan in the UK: a brand of wood seal proudly stated that ‘it does exactly what it says on the tin.’ What does it say on your tin? Does it say that you’ll wander off into giving tidbit sof the lives of 1950s directors? If I had bought a book advsrtising itself as anecdotes about meeting thes men, this would be perfect. In a narrative about war corresponfgibg, not so much. If you think it’s vital to retain this information, I’d suggest that you revise the stnopsis to make it clear how digressive the book is.
Style:
One of the key distinguisihg features betweeen amateur and prtofessional e-book writers is the use of modifiers. Too many adjectives make sentences indigestible. I suggest removing as many as possible. Reading one’s work aloud will reveal how clunky an over-modified sentence is. Most writers don’t take the trouble to read their work aloud, but the benefits are huge. Excessive amounts of scrap and customer rejects has caused us to recommend three solutions to this. One, a new glue pot at a cost of $6,500. A more favorable solution is repairing the existing glue pot for $1,500 and then to purchase an International Glue
Line Inspection System, the price for this system is $4,000. The new glue line system will decrease scrap and customer rejects by 75 percent. The system will detect breaks in the glue line and ejects defective cartons from the run. If the system detects more than five consecutive rejects, it automatically stops the machine. In the first year of use, the cost savings will exceed $10,000. More than covering the cost of rebuilding the glue pot and the new inspection system.
Ceri Levy’s new feature-length documentary about Damon Albarn and Jamie Hewlett’s band
Gorillaz is in the final stages of editing.
By depleting or over harvesting of the trees has lead to soil erosion and increased desertification of the area. Soil erosion depletes nutrients from the soil leaving the land poor
Style:
One of the key distinguisihg features betweeen amateur and prtofessional e-book writers is the use of modifiers. Too many adjectives make sentences indigestible. I suggest removing as many as possible. Reading one’s work aloud will reveal how clunky an over-modified sentence is. Most writers don’t take the trouble to read their work aloud, but the benefits are huge. Excessive amounts of scrap and customer rejects has caused us to recommend three solutions to this. One, a new glue pot at a cost of $6,500. A more favorable solution is repairing the existing glue pot for $1,500 and then to purchase an International Glue
Line Inspection System, the price for this system is $4,000. The new glue line system will decrease scrap and customer rejects by 75 percent. The system will detect breaks in the glue line and ejects defective cartons from the run. If the system detects more than five consecutive rejects, it automatically stops the machine. In the first year of use, the cost savings will exceed $10,000. More than covering the cost of rebuilding the glue pot and the new inspection system.
Ceri Levy’s new feature-length documentary about Damon Albarn and Jamie Hewlett’s band
Gorillaz is in the final stages of editing.
By depleting or over harvesting of the trees has lead to soil erosion and increased desertification of the area. Soil erosion depletes nutrients from the soil leaving the land poor