Mobile Advantages & Disadvantages

MOBILE PHONE IS A GOOD TECHNOLOGY WHICH IS NOT LACKING FROM OUR LIVES. THIS REPORT WILL DISCUSS THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF USING MOBILE PHONES.
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TODAY, MOBILE PHONE HAS BECOME POPULAR TO EVERYBODY SINCE IT IS VERY CONVENIENT.
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BECAUSE OF THEIR CONVENIENCE, MOBILE PHONES HAVE BECOME UNIVERSALLY POPULAR.

THE MOST ADVANTAGE OF HAVING A MOBILE PHONE IS YOU CAN COMMUNICATE TO YOUR FAMILY AND YOUR FRIENDS NO MATTER WHAT WHERE YOU ARE. FOR INSTANCE, YOU CAN CONTACT EASILY TO YOUR FRIENDS BY CALLING OR SENDING MESSAGES EVERYWHERE WITHOUT ELECTRICITY. IT IS MAYBE THE MAIN REASON WHY ALMOST ALL PEOPLE TODAY CHOOSE TO OWN A MOBILE PHONE.
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WITH THEM WE CAN CALL ANYONE AT ANY TIME, INDEPENDENT OF A LANDLINE CONNECTION.

FROM THE CUSTOMER’S POINT OF VIEW, IT IS OBVIOUS THAT MOBILE PHONES ASSIST YOU IN BUSINESS A LOT, SUCH AS, MAKE SCHEDULE OF WORKING, SURF THE INTERNET, AND KEEP IN TOUCH WITH THEIR COMPANIES.
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OUR CELLIES KEEP US IN CONSTANT COMMUNICATION WITH OUR FAMILIES, OUR FRIENDS, AND OUR BUSINESSES.

MOREOVER, YOU CAN RELAX WITH MOBILE PHONE’S APPLICATIONS, FOR EXAMPLE, PLAY GAMES, LISTEN TO MUSIC, OR CHAT WITH YOUR FRIENDS.
WE ALSO USE SPECIAL APPS FOR LISTENING TO MUSIC, PLAYING GAMES, SURFING THE NET, AND TEXT MESSAGING. IT'S HARD TO PICTURE LIFE AS IT WAS BEFORE THE MOBILE PHONE.

ON THE OTHER HAND, THERE ARE ALSO DISADVANTAGES.
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BUT THERE ARE DISADVANTAGES TO THE USE OF MOBILE PHONES.

USING A LOT MOBILE PHONE CAN HARM YOUR BRAIN, PARTICULARLY TEENAGER AND CHILDREN WHO ARE UNDER 16 YEARS OLD.
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USING MOBILE PHONES IS SAID TO BE HARMFUL TO THE BRAIN, ESPECIALLY FOR THOSE WHO ARE UNDER THE AGE OF SIXTEEN.

IF YOU USE MOBILE PHONES TOO MUCH, YOU WILL GET BAD EFFECTS LIKE DIZZY, BLOOD-BRAIN BARRIER, OR EARS PROBLEMS.
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EXCESSIVE USE OF MOBILE PHONES HAS BEEN ACCUSED OF CAUSING DIZZINESS,
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IN ADDITION, WHEN YOU USE MOBILE PHONES WHILE YOU ARE DRIVING, YOU WILL GET AN ACCIDENT.
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AND DRIVERS DISTRACTED BY TALKING ON THEIR CELL PHONES ARE MORE LIKELY TO GET INTO CAR CRASHES.

MOREOVER, “RADIATIONS EMITTED FROM THE PHONE ARE DEAD HARMFUL FOR THE EARDRUM”, HAS PROVED BY MANY SCIENTIST.
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IT IS ESSENTIAL NOT GOOD FOR YOU AND OTHERS. OWNING A MOBILE PHONE IN YOUR HAND IS YOU CAN SOLVE MANY ISSUES AND HOLD MOST OF INFORMATION AROUND THE WORLD. EVEN THOUGH IS NOT GOOD FOR YOUR HEALTH AND YOU HAVE TO PROTECT YOURSELF FROM BAD EFFECTS OF MOBILE PHONES IF YOU CHOOSE TO HAVE ONE.
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MOBILE PHONES SOLVE PROBLEMS AND PROVIDE NEW CHANNELS OF COMMUNICATION. WE CAN ACCESS ALL THE WORLD'S INFORMATION NO MATTER WHERE WE ARE, JUST BY USING A DEVICE SMALL ENOUGH TO FIT INTO ONE HAND.

BUT BE CAREFUL -- MOBILE PHONES MIGHT ALSO BE BAD FOR YOU!

P/S: PLZ HELP ME TO CORRECT THIS ESSAY SINCE NEXT WEEK I'M GOING TO DO FINAL EXAM. HOW CAN I REDUCE THIS ESSAY BECAUSE I SHOULD WRITE FROM 150 TO 180 WORDS AND THIS ESSAY HAS ABOUT 291 WORDS. THANK YOU FOR HELPING ME.

I RAN THIS THROUGH A WORD DOC TO GET A WORD COUNT. THIS COMES IN AT 190 WORDS.

BECAUSE OF THEIR CONVENIENCE, MOBILE PHONES HAVE BECOME UNIVERSALLY POPULAR. WITH THEM WE CAN CALL ANYONE AT ANY TIME, INDEPENDENT OF A LANDLINE CONNECTION. OUR CELLIES KEEP US IN CONSTANT COMMUNICATION WITH OUR FAMILIES, OUR FRIENDS, AND OUR BUSINESSES. WE ALSO USE SPECIAL APPS FOR LISTENING TO MUSIC, PLAYING GAMES, SURFING THE NET, AND TEXT MESSAGING. IT'S HARD TO PICTURE LIFE AS IT WAS BEFORE THE MOBILE PHONE.

BUT THERE ARE DISADVANTAGES TO THE USE OF MOBILE PHONES. USING MOBILE PHONES IS SAID TO BE HARMFUL TO THE BRAIN, ESPECIALLY FOR THOSE WHO ARE UNDER THE AGE OF SIXTEEN. EXCESSIVE USE OF MOBILE PHONES HAS BEEN ACCUSED OF CAUSING DIZZINESS, AND "RADIATIONS EMITTED FROM THE PHONE ARE DEAD HARMFUL FOR THE EARDRUM," SAYS (PERSON'S NAME AND TITLE.) AND DRIVERS DISTRACTED BY TALKING ON THEIR CELL PHONES ARE MORE LIKELY TO GET INTO CAR CRASHES.

MOBILE PHONES SOLVE PROBLEMS AND PROVIDE NEW CHANNELS OF COMMUNICATION. WE CAN ACCESS ALL THE WORLD'S INFORMATION NO MATTER WHERE WE ARE, JUST BY USING A DEVICE SMALL ENOUGH TO FIT INTO ONE HAND.

BUT BE CAREFUL -- MOBILE PHONES MIGHT ALSO BE BAD FOR YOU!