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Essays: 1. Please provide us with a summary of your personal and family background, information about your parents and siblings, where you grew up, and perhaps a special memory of your youth. (1000 words)
A friend of mine once said to me: "People who move to a new country during their adolescent years either become passive and indifferent towith the new environment and remain foreign for the rest of their lives, or they come to possess a special drive for reaching the top." AlthoughSometimes I wonder how much truth there is in thisher statement, but I know that moving to the United States at 17 was the biggest turning point of my life.
Jean -- This is a great quote. However, it makes the reader want to know which type of person you are: the indifferent type, or the type who has come to possess a special drive. You know that you are the latter, but you have to make that clear to the reader. You could say something like, “Although I wonder how much truth there is in her statement, I know that moving to the United States at 17 contributed in large part to my current drive to succeed (or current ambition, or desire to be the best, or something to that effect)”. This ties the sentence in a much clearer way to your introductory sentence.
I grew up in Beijing, - the capital of China. Even though I had no siblings and my father was pursuing a research career at at Yale University pursuing his research career during most of my childhood, I was surrounded by cousins and other relatives. Life was filled with grew up in a big family with six cousins and life was full of fun family activities. My mother— was famous for her quick wit— and was the leader ofin any group with which she was involved. Never satisfied being the second best, she was constantly thinking of different ways to do things, to improvise, and to improve. To her, nothing was impossible. Growing up under her influence, I endeavored thrive to be the best among my peers, which, for , which
A friend of mine once said to me: "People who move to a new country during their adolescent years either become passive and indifferent towith the new environment and remain foreign for the rest of their lives, or they come to possess a special drive for reaching the top." AlthoughSometimes I wonder how much truth there is in thisher statement, but I know that moving to the United States at 17 was the biggest turning point of my life.
Jean -- This is a great quote. However, it makes the reader want to know which type of person you are: the indifferent type, or the type who has come to possess a special drive. You know that you are the latter, but you have to make that clear to the reader. You could say something like, “Although I wonder how much truth there is in her statement, I know that moving to the United States at 17 contributed in large part to my current drive to succeed (or current ambition, or desire to be the best, or something to that effect)”. This ties the sentence in a much clearer way to your introductory sentence.
I grew up in Beijing, - the capital of China. Even though I had no siblings and my father was pursuing a research career at at Yale University pursuing his research career during most of my childhood, I was surrounded by cousins and other relatives. Life was filled with grew up in a big family with six cousins and life was full of fun family activities. My mother— was famous for her quick wit— and was the leader ofin any group with which she was involved. Never satisfied being the second best, she was constantly thinking of different ways to do things, to improvise, and to improve. To her, nothing was impossible. Growing up under her influence, I endeavored thrive to be the best among my peers, which, for , which