Personal Narrative: Short Story: 'Says Lupita'

“Juanita it's almost your birthday!” Says Lupita.
“I know I'll be 15 soon.” Said Juanita.
“What do you wanna do?” Said Lupita.
“Let's go out and have a day for us and just have fun.” Said Juanita
“ Sounds like fun when will we go?” Said Lupita.
“Next week on Saturday.”said Juanita.
“Ohh… Okay.” Said Lupita.
“Yeah it will be fun!”said Lupita.
Juanita and Lupita each went home. Juanita was worried that her friend didn't wanna go with her because Lupita seemed unsure,but she knew her best friend wouldn't leave her by herself on her birthday. Juanita went home to let her mom know about her plans.
“Hey mom.” Said Juanita.
“Hi how was it with Lupita?” Said Juanita’s mom.
“Good mom, we actually have plans on my birthday if that's okay.?”said
“Well you are getting older I guess you can and I'll have a little party for you when. You get back.” Said mom.
“Thanks mom but I think we would be back late.” Said Juanita.
“Your welcome my love.” Said mom.
Juanita headed to her room super happy because she couldn't even image in all the fun they would have she was as happy as a mouse with its cheese,spend her birthday with her best friend and have a great time. Soon it was her birthday, she got up her family sang to her and hugged her
“Happy birthday Juanita you're getting so old !” Said mom kissing my forehead.She got up and went to her room and took a shower and then she got ready and did her hair all curly and some nice jeans and a party kind of shirt. She called Lupita and no one answered her she was getting upset she called again, nothing she waited a hour and then she headed out to the park so her mom would think she was without Lupita it wasn't. For while Juanita walked to the park and she heard a familiar voice laughing.
“Sounds like Lupita?” Said Juanita.
She ran towards the water fountain she saw her with her boyfriend hugging and all. Juanita was angry and upset she didn't really know how to feel. Lupita ran up to
“No worry.” said the man.
Lupita was confused she didn't know what to do “Is he blind?” Lupita asked herself
“Ah sorry to ask but can you please help me to my house, I lost my phone and I can't call my family to come get me.” Said the man.
“Here you can use mine.” Said Lupita.
“Well I don't remember anyone's number…” Said the man.
“I'll take you to your house.”Said Lupita
She grabbed his hand by the elbow and walked into dark night.
There she was in front of large nice house.
“Here, we are here.” Said Lupita.
“Would you be nice enough and take me to the living room?” Said the man.
“Mm yes I can.” Said Lupita.
As they walked into the house she shivered. The room was dark but she found a light and turned it on. As they made their way into what seemed a very long way into the house.
“I have to go sorry!” Said Lupita.
She started walking away fast when all of a sudden she felt a hand on her shoulder.
“We're do you think you're going!You're mine now.”said the man.
“Agh leave me alone you're not even blind are you!” Said Lupita.
“No, but you fell for it now you're gonna stay here forever like all my others.!” Said the man.
He grabbed her and slapped her she passed out. He carried her to his