Reflective Essay English Class

Our first assigned essay was to analyze class readings and add our personal experiences to agree or disagree with the ideas presented. I really enjoyed writing essay-one the first time around and also enjoyed revising it for my final project with the knowledge gained from my first semester in English 101. Essay-one included my personal experiences, anecdotes of authors from class readings, and gave me a chance to write about something deep within my inner self. It being essay-one, I had and knew I had trouble developing PIE paragraphs with strong topic sentences. After revising the first topic sentences in my paragraphs to ensure I had been including all aspects of the PIE paragraphs, point illustration and explanation, I began to construct paragraphs that were full of detail and in coherence with the rest of my essay.
To start my thesis stated, “Parker Palmar states student fears in his essay “The Courage to Teach” and Amy Tan discusses language struggles in her essay “Mother Tongue” and it is through their work that I can relate my personal struggle with finding my identity while in school”. After rereading my essay and the comments provide to me by my professor, I conclude that my essay contained different ideas than what I had originally stated in my thesis. I rewrote my thesis to say “Parker Palmer…which showed me how it was that I overcame my fear of rejection and the feeling of being ashamed about my mothers broken English. It is through their work that I can relate my personal struggles I encountered while finding my identity.” Now my thesis related back to the two main ideas presented in my essay, which were rejection and my mother’s English. This was an important step in my revision process because it allowed me to then ensure my topic sentences related back to the ideas stated in my