Reflective Essay-Personal Narrative

Letter of Introduction Over the past four years of high school, I have seen growth in my essay, like most anyone would. My weaknesses are and continue to be word choice and syntax, however, it is not as bad as it used to be and I persist to improve on it every essay I write. My strengths encompass a compelling grabber and an effective use of transitions. I still have masses to improve on in my writing, but it has come a long way from what it once was. Each essay is in order of which I wrote them and comprise of at least one essay from each year. This illustrates the improvement over the four years in high school. Each essay has word choice and syntax alterations to aid the essay’s flow as well as more practical uses of transitions, if I failed to use them sufficiently before. For example, when we wrote the College Essay earlier this year I wrote these sentences, “A challenge that can occur is overzealous parents that need calming down and making sure that I stay calm from the parents who are yelling at me. As parents overreact to my decisions, I quickly learned to ignore the hurtful words that were being thrown at me and focused on refereeing the game the way that I was taught.” My revision to these sentences now looks
One essay, the Hero Narrative, is from the beginning of the year while my other essay, the Fear Narrative is from the end. These essay’s show my improvement over the freshman year and from freshman year to now. An example sentence from the Fear Narrative is “All the pieces from the game had just jumped out at me from out of nowhere. It had scared me so much that I screamed like a crying baby.” The revision looks like “All the pieces from the game hurdled themselves at me which made me shriek at the top of my lungs because the game startled me so much.” Again, sentence now flows better and displays much