The writer should add more description about the senses is highlighted in the essay. The writer should describe what the chocolate dipped pretzels taste like, smell, and feel like. Describe Alice’s appearance, and describe what she sounds like. The irrelevant details is highlighted in the essay. The writer should describe Alice’s way of reading, and how she treated people like adults. During our lessons, she made me feel special and always listened intently to my rambling.
The writer should add more description about the senses is highlighted in the essay. The writer should describe what the chocolate dipped pretzels taste like, smell, and feel like. Describe Alice’s appearance, and describe what she sounds like. The irrelevant details is highlighted in the essay. The writer should describe Alice’s way of reading, and how she treated people like adults. During our lessons, she made me feel special and always listened intently to my rambling.