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I want to start off by thanking you, Mr. Torres for being a wonderful teacher to me. You helped me become a better writer, and I am pleased with your teaching skills. The three essays I am bringing forward for you to read are “Credits”, “Hawaii in the Mist”, and my midterm “Smart Move.” My first essay “Credits”, I chose these three essays, because I feel like I put all my effort into writing the best work through. Learning how to avoid comma splices and sentence fragment helped me fix a lot of mistakes I would always make while I write my essays. During my process of revising my essays, I realized I sounded repetitive with a lot of my sentences. In the essay “Credits” I noticed I had a lot of comma splices, so what I did to fix this problem
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