Textual Analysis

The most difficult aspect of the essay was finding evidence that supported my thesis. Although I knew the direction that my analysis was heading in, I did not use the correct textual evidence to support my claims. This became the recurring issue throughout my essay. Most of the textual evidence that I used for one argument supported a different idea. For instance, I claimed that Piggy’s lack of self confidence prevents him from obtaining authoritarian power, but the quote I used actually supported the fall of civilization. The lack of support is likely due to the fact that I used the first piece of textual evidence that I see, rather than thoroughly looking through the book and my notes to find better textual evidence. Overall, I believe that if I had spent more time finding a better supportive quote, my ideas would have been better projected.
After reading through the comments, I understand why the grammatical errors interfere with comprehension of the essay. For example, my thesis was missing words and punctuations, which caused confusion. For my next analytical essay, I want to score an eight or a nine on both syntax and mechanics. In order to reach this goal, I plan to spend more time editing and reviewing my work before I submit. I will also read my essay out loud a few times rather than read it silently. Reading my essay out loud will help me find the grammatical errors that I missed while reading it in my mind. In general, I believe that I should have spent more time on the essay as a whole, rather than trying to finish it as quickly as