Toothpaste critique
Arif 3 Mouzam Arif
Mr. O’Gorman
ENG3U0 – A
September 16, 2014
Writing a Critique: What’s in This Toothpaste? In the essay What’s in This Toothpaste? by David Bodanis. The audience/reader is informed about how toothpaste in made, the ingredients which are used to make just a bottle of tube and other alternatives that can be used if you opinion about toothpaste changes. The author talks about if toothpaste is something you should consider or keep using. There are a few examples of diction which are present in the essay, the first one would be, “It’s there because people like to have a big gob of toothpaste to spread on the brush.” This creates a mental picture/image in the readers mind because, this effect relates to imagery while the reader is reading that passage they can relate to it because they have seen it in first person. Another example of imagery is present as the author states, “The tube of toothpaste is squeezed, it’s pinched metal seams are splayed.” This creates the same visual effect in the readers mind, when they are doing that and it is impossible to make the toothpaste to come out, so this relates to the readers past experience. Another example where David Bodanis shows imagery is, “This is the flavouring, and it has to be strong. Double rectified peppermint oil is used.” This creates an imagery of smell which the reader often smells after brushing his/her teeth. In the essay syntax is present, the first example is where and how the author places his paragraphs, the author in depth states his first topic and first ingredient and then backs up his argument, he then explains what the ingredient is used for and also gives a description. This show that the paragraphs are well placed and explained, this creates an effect of keeping the essay neat and well organized. Another example where the author shows sentence structure is how the author keeps the paragraphs short, which tends to trick the reader that he is reading less but really he is
Mr. O’Gorman
ENG3U0 – A
September 16, 2014
Writing a Critique: What’s in This Toothpaste? In the essay What’s in This Toothpaste? by David Bodanis. The audience/reader is informed about how toothpaste in made, the ingredients which are used to make just a bottle of tube and other alternatives that can be used if you opinion about toothpaste changes. The author talks about if toothpaste is something you should consider or keep using. There are a few examples of diction which are present in the essay, the first one would be, “It’s there because people like to have a big gob of toothpaste to spread on the brush.” This creates a mental picture/image in the readers mind because, this effect relates to imagery while the reader is reading that passage they can relate to it because they have seen it in first person. Another example of imagery is present as the author states, “The tube of toothpaste is squeezed, it’s pinched metal seams are splayed.” This creates the same visual effect in the readers mind, when they are doing that and it is impossible to make the toothpaste to come out, so this relates to the readers past experience. Another example where David Bodanis shows imagery is, “This is the flavouring, and it has to be strong. Double rectified peppermint oil is used.” This creates an imagery of smell which the reader often smells after brushing his/her teeth. In the essay syntax is present, the first example is where and how the author places his paragraphs, the author in depth states his first topic and first ingredient and then backs up his argument, he then explains what the ingredient is used for and also gives a description. This show that the paragraphs are well placed and explained, this creates an effect of keeping the essay neat and well organized. Another example where the author shows sentence structure is how the author keeps the paragraphs short, which tends to trick the reader that he is reading less but really he is