Video Games and their potential harm

In this essay I improved in the areas of presenting two arguments. When writing an essay that argues a certain point, it is important to present both sides of the argument in order to give importance to your thoughts and final point. In the Green Essay, I wrote about the importance of keeping family farms alive in America, and spent a majority of the essay writing about how family farms are more beneficial to our nation than corporate or factory farms. I do not think I did a good job in presenting why certain individuals feel that corporate farming is better for our nation. I still feel like I am struggling in sticking to a certain outline to prove my points. Sometimes when I get numerous thoughts on what to write about in my head it is hard for me to organize them in the essay to create a well-structured thesis, body, and conclusion. I am extremely proud of this essay because it was very emotionally appealing to me. As someone who has been addicted to video games in their past, it was interesting to research the dangers that playing video games has and to argue that video game addiction is a very real thing. If I had more time on this essay I would probably change my essay to be more structured. There are a few times in the essay where I feel like my thoughts and arguments are aimlessly written and not very well organized to prove my point better.

Video Games: Ultimately Damaging to our Society
Jared Olesen
Glendale Community College With modern technology booming in today’s world, video and computer games have become a staple of success. According to the NPD Group, the video game industry in the year 2009 sold 273 million units adding up to $10.5 billion in revenue. The Entertainment Software Rating Board has several statistics on the computer and video game industry; one in particular states, “67% of US households play video games” (ESRB, 2010). With so many US households giving life to this industry it raises a new issue, one that argues that video