wishes with revising your paper! Hi‚ Gregory! I am Kobe F.‚ and I am happy to read and comment on your work today. I like your choice of Jimmy Cross for your discussion because he suffers the most important conflict between desire and duty in O’Brien’s story. Below I suggest some improvements to your thesis statement‚ conclusion‚ and comma use to help you enhance your paper. The ERF and embedded comments include the draft being on topic and grammatically correct as in “Help Requested.” So here we go!
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STORY OF NATIVITY About two thousand years ago‚ in the town of Nazareth‚ there lived a young woman named Mary. She was engaged to be married to Joseph‚ a carpenter. One day an angel appeared before her and told her she had been chosen to have a special baby. The baby would be God’s son and she must call him Jesus. Soon after the angel’s visit‚ Mary and Joseph were married. Mary was due to have her baby when they were told they had to go on a long journey to Bethlehem‚ which was where Joseph came
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Cari’s Story A.) How could an infection in Cari’s nasal passages and pharynx spread into her sinuses? The infection in Cari’s nasal passages and pharynx was able to spread into her sinuses due to the sinuses being a drainage area for the nasal passages. B.) What is the couch reflex? Describe the process that Cari’s respiratory system is using to clear her lungs by coughing. The cough reflex is used to clear sputum and irritants that are in the nasal passages and pharynx. There are cilia in
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Lillian FleetonOctober 21‚ 2014 Cari’s story How can an infection in Cari nasal passages and pharyns spread into her sinuses? The infection in Cari’s nasal passages and pharynx was able to spread into her sinuses due to the sinuses being a drainage area for the nasal passages. What is the cough reflex? Describe the process that Cari’s respiratory system is using to clear her lungs by coughing. The cough reflex is used to clear sputum and irritants that are in the nasal passages and pharynx
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The Story of Crossing Amongst today’s society there seems to be plenty of judgment. Wherever you go it is quite easy to find someone whom will ask or tell you ‘why are you wearing that shirt’‚ or ‘why do you speak with an accent.’ People do not accept others whom do not fit the stereotypical American. In doing so this creates many cultural differences and problems between ethnicities. Some of these problems most definitely include discrimination which can lead to high self consciousness. Much
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Nicole Banley ENG 125 David Schonfeld 04.07.2013 I believe the theme of the story is that Sophia feels it is her right to explore her sexuality however she pleases and to have an independent life‚ no matter what her father thinks. The writer uses setting to narrow the underlying idea‚ the theme. In this story‚ there are two different settings. The first one is in Sophia’s father’s home where she gets scolded for having love letters. Her father finds them and asks if she has been deflowered
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AP2630 Unit 6 Case Study 1: Chloe’s Story Date: October 27‚ 2014 Which serous membrane in Chloe’s abdomen most likely contains the greatest amount of adipose tissue? The peritoneum is the largest serous membrane of the body and it contains the greater omentum‚ the largest peritoneal fold. The greater omentum generally contains a considerable amount of adipose tissue. The adipose tissue can greatly expand with weight gain What involuntary muscular process initiated by deglutition of water may
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Long ago‚ there was a newly trained warrior from across the seas of Antonica‚ the race of the forgotten iksar being newly re-discovered had begun the life of one iksar. This neophyte warrior’s name was Lyzzard. Lyzzard trained outside of his hometown killing scorpions and scaled wolf pups until he gained the level of 5. At this time he was getting bored of the creatures that inhabited the outside area of the gates of Cabilis and noticed that the road lead down into a pit. When Lyzzard decided
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Okonkwo’s story is similar to the western tragedy and the tragic hero because in the western tragedy it says how the main character has great importance not only culturally but economically. Okonkwo is also well respected in his tribe and admired due to the wrestling match he had with a bully of the tribe. The only thing from the western tragedy is that onkonkwo didn’t have a noble birth of childhood because his father was a failure and owed the whole tribe money. The tragic
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Toys of all shapes and sizes scattered around the play area‚ the soft spoken words of story time given by a friendly face‚ stains from spilt glasses of grape juice that overrun the carpet‚ and endless numbers of shelves that envelope any remaining space on the walls. This could only be described as my daycare‚ Sunshine Oaks. While we all crowd around the teacher‚ mesmerized by the tale about pirates‚ the story comes to an end. We get settled down and lead into the nap area where we all know what
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