original essay‚ and the feedback that was given. After looking and reviewing all this information‚ I looked at the weakness in the essay. I started with the thesis statement. Even though the points of the thesis stayed the same‚ I tried to make it more argumentative. Therefore‚ I changed the wording and choice of words used. After focusing on the thesis‚ I then looked at the introduction. I copied my
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I. Introduction A. Finding childcare can be hard and you may find yourself wondering how can childcare benefit your child. B. Thesis statement: Finding child care is important to me because childcare helps with language and social development‚ prepares children for future schooling‚ and is workforce support for parents. II. Body My first reason: Childcare helps with language and social development 1.More possibilities to connect with other children equals more chances to learn how to socialize
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Sinners in the Hands of an Angry God. Thesis Statement is: The thesis of Jonathan Edwards sermon tells as that those who have not accepted Jesus Christ as their Lord and personal savior are on the track which leads to hell. Edwards cites evidence that God at any point in time could throw those who have not gone through a religious changing situation or experienced an inward renewal down to hell. This being said leaves mankind helpless or with very little option‚ so we should yearn for him‚ get closer
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Drinking Age Argumentative Essay In the United States‚ a person gets all their rights at the age of 18 except the right to drink. Here‚ you can’t drink until you’re 21. One of the main reasons for this being the drinking age is the high risk of drunk driving. On the other hand‚ underage drinkers have a higher chance to binge drink. Many other counties already have the drinking age at 18. The drinking age should become 18 because we get all our other rights then‚ and it will lower the amount of
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Save Lives by Keeping the Drinking Age at 21 Listening to the news on television‚ hearing other students talk about it‚ is it really true‚ or are they going to lower the drinking age to 18? This is not just a rumor but nowhere have they actually lowered the age. The debate has been talked about for the last few years. The nation has always tried different things to solve the irresponsible drinking problems. In order to try and prevent this problem America has tried a national prohibition in the
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The controversial topic of lowering the drinking age has been present since they raised the minimum drinking age from eighteen to twenty-one in the summer of 1984. Today‚ we see that drinking is more than just an occasional weekend activity for young adults. Whether it be a young adult or a middle-aged individual‚ the consumption of alcohol is a popular coping mechanism for any misfortune one may endure. The only difference being that young adults are more susceptible to addiction. Another issue
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Legalizing the Drinking Age to 18 When people turn to the age of eighteen‚ they are finally considered an adult. They can join the army‚ have the right to vote‚ buy cigarettes or tobacco products‚ get a tattoo and even die for our country‚ but they aren’t allowed to buy alcohol? A person can be responsible enough to live on his or her own‚ make money‚ pay bills‚ and yet they are not old enough to purchase or consume any type of alcohol. Underage drinking has been a major controversial issue for
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Topic: MRSA and You. General Purpose : To inform Specific Purpose: To inform the audience about the bacteria Methicillin-Resistant Staphylococcus Aureus. Thesis Statement: MRSA is an infection caused by a strain of Staphylococcus that has become resistant to antibiotics commonly used to treat staph infections. Preview Statement: Many of you have heard of MRSA‚ today im going to tell you exactly what type of bacteria it is and how to minimize your exposure to it. Introduction: Attention
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Jerry Lopez ENG 68 Mushik 2/27/13 The Minimum Legal Drinking Age Underage drinking has been become a large issue in the recent decades‚ becoming a rising issues mainly among young college students. This debate of either lowering the drinking age or keeping it as it is has caught great attention‚ especially with academic superiors. In 2008‚ 100 college presidents called for a debate about bringing down the drinking age. In Shari Roan’s essay‚ “Tempest in a Bottle‚” agreed that “[their] experience
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Drinking Age Final Draft The underdeveloped liver quakes over the burden of the alcohol that the drinker has just consumed. It shuts down‚ in spite of the fact that the drinker has had only one beer. The drinking age is 21 for a reason. Nobody should have to perish for that to be proven. The drinking age should stay 21‚ because the human body is fully developed at this age‚ and this age will help keep alcohol out of school. It has been scientifically proven that the human body becomes fully developed
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