Analysis Of A Memoir: Julio

Julio, I enjoyed reading your memoir. I definitely learned a lot about you from the part you have finished. I look forward to seeing where you are going with the piece. As you finish, keep in mind the end goal of what you want the reader to leave with after finishing the memoir. What are you trying to teach us about your life? When first reading the line “I honestly do not know in what moment my sister was taken from my hands” I thought that you were speaking figuratively and this was your way of telling us that she had died. After continuing, I realized that you actually meant her being physically taken from your arms. Maybe consider rewording so that we know you mean literally not being sure when the paramedics took her from your arms to
rush her to the emergency helicopter that had just landed in your neighbor’s yard. I was also a little confused during the scene when you guys were in the car on the way to the hospital. You wrote that in that moment you have absolutely no faith, and then your mom reads the verse about only needing faith the size of a mustard seed. After she reads the verse you go on to say that in that moment your faith was stronger than ever. Did this realization truly come in the few seconds it took for you mom to read the verse, or did it come after you saw your sister at the hospital and the doctor tells you that she must be a miracle?