Professor – Janice Betian
August 19, 2011
Effective Persuasion Week Six Assignment The author did a magnificent job to persuade my thinking toward health care system in the United States that health care should be considered as a fundamental right to all U.S. citizens. The author’s essay was easy to follow, well constructed, and straight-forward to his topic sentence. Writer had a strong introduction, supportive points, and a conclusion. The author provided enough facts to support his /her argument regarding health insurance should be accepted as basic right for all the U.S. citizens just like education. Health care converges are very expensive that a normal person cannot effort. I like the fact he presented in his/ her writing that even citizens with health insurance will still end up paying out of their pocket. Insurance companies more concerns about their profits than providing health coverage. There is always a waiting list or have to wait in line to see a doctor even if you are covered by insurance. The entire U.S citizens have to stand up and fight for their rights. I also realized that the author did not use any I statements, which means the author is not bias. That is true that having health care system to the U.S. citizens will save many lives and courage the health of all Americans. I will be using feedback from WritePoint to make my persuasive essay more effective. WritePoint’s feedback helps to fix some of the common grammar errors such as leaving out commas, right words choices; using awkward construction such as “his/her”, spelling check, and much more can help me to make my persuasive essay more effective. WritePoint also recommend avoiding using first and second person such as I and You in sentences. With the help of WritePoint my essay will be grammar error free, which will sound much better when the reader will be reading it. My essay will persuade my audience every effectively. I will make sure my essay is error free