In addition, the topic of immigration and the abuse of women in Iran are relevant issues to explore. The tone is consistently dramatic.
The goal for the main protagonist is clear and the stakes are high. The supporting characters of Mojan and Reece also have emotional goals. Mojan wants to crusade for Iranian women and Reece struggles with his own feelings about the war and his brother.
Indeed, the highlights are the characters and their relationships with each other. The main protagonist, Lawrence, has a unique physical challenge, Bardet-Biedl syndrome, which makes his character even more special. He stands …show more content…
The hitting of Lawrence and the cracking of his glasses is a smart story choice. It’s a bitter relationship arc and symbolic of their relationship shattering. Lawrence’s decision to go with Mojan propels the plot forward.
The second act remains goal-centered, driven by their search for the uncle and the obstacles they have to overcome, such as the teen bullies and the smugglers.
Reece’s guilt is well highlighted in the second act. He finds the address and this propels him to change. However, to add more tension, consider adding an obstacle for Reece as he makes his way to the house. This will elevate the anticipation and tension of him getting to his brother and Mojan before something terrible happens. It adds a small ticking clock.
The action at the house is well done, as the brothers team up to fight the smugglers. While it’s workable, some might question why the smugglers are at the uncle’s house when there were so many other immigrants. It’s a bit convenient that they pick her uncle, but as stated, it’s very