Dr. Renee J. Schlueter
September 2, 2011
Picking up hitchhikers in upstate New York is illegal. Murray struggled internally while he passed a ninety-two year old on the highway, because he seen too much of his own mother in her just to let her go by. Murray also struggled internally while the older lady explained she was going to Nassau, only three miles away from where she was at. He could not understand why this senior-citizen would be out walking three miles up and down steep hills. Externally, Murray had conflicts with where he was going to drop her off at. She made it clear that she did not want to be taken home, nor did she want to go to the police. The ninety-two year old was confused and embarrassed.
Internally, Murray thought about his own mother who was ninety years old and now living in the nursing home. He thought he should tell the ninety-two year olds son about the incident but was fighting with himself about the consequences of his own actions. Murray settled with asking the older woman if she would “promise me you’ll tell the druggist if no one comes soon.” He thought that way everyone wins. The first three paragraphs set the background and explain the situation with descriptive details. Without these descriptive details I would not have know how fragile the woman was. Murray uses a subjective description connecting stories and situations with the ninety-two year old and his own mother. Vivid details were used in the essay as well. He describes the woman’s appearance, “…dark blue raincoat, jaunty black beret. Thin arms waving, spine a little bent. Wisps of white hair lifting as trucks whizzed by,” and his own mothers home in Long Island, New York.