She generalizes in more than one part. The author says, “everyone knows about what happens academically in some artistic institutes, and what doesn’t happen”(4). Her statement is not accurate, and she assume that everyone know, when they may not. So, she has to get rid of this kind of writing and be more specific and clear about her point. She could mention a specific category or to say that perhaps some people know what is happening and so. The author can make the changes in each part that she have generalities in it, like when she mention the teachers or the or …show more content…
She mentioned a certain group called Group 29 but gave no further details to show the reader how important this group and how it could have an impact on their case. She also mention “the united nation’s committee on the Rights of the Child”(4), without going further more details in order to show this organization's efforts in resolving the issue of illegal residents, if any. In addition, the author brings the fact of the report over the daily matters of the stateless residents, and the response to them. The reader can see there is a controversy between Group 29 and Al-Nasser, but if the reader doesn't have any previous information or background, they could get the exact idea over the situation. She should define them and mention who they are, and what they do, she may give some examples to reinforce her