The Best Decision I Have Made: Returning to School

Returning to school

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Returning to School Lindsy Vickers ENG 121 Colin Murcray 10/16/2012

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The beginning of my new life began with my decision to return to school. Education is very empowering aspect of someone’s life, especially mine. College is much more than just a degree. In college you also learn how to learn, perhaps one of the most important things you can get out of college. Returning to school is and will be the best decision I have made.
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1. is very Please carefully edit your writing. Try reading it out loud. You missed a word here. [Rebecca Heckman] 2. made. You have shifted your point of view. This paper calls for an objective point-of-view and you shifted from 'me' to 'you. This is not appropriate for an academic paper. [Rebecca Heckman] 3. you You shifted from I to you. Please write in a consistent point-of-view. [Rebecca Heckman] 4. there Do you need this word? How might you reword this sentence for more clarity? EX: It was difficult for my father to raise children as a single parent. [Rebecca Heckman] 5. of. Please do not end sentences with a preposition. See the Ashford Writing Center for additional information. [Rebecca Heckman] 6. one day Use commas to set off nonrestrictive words. See the Ashford Writing Center for additional information. [Rebecca Heckman] 7. feeling. This is a very long paragraph. Your reader might feel overwhelmed trying to read it all. Where might you split this paragraph? How might you add a conclusion paragraph? [Rebecca Heckman]

I have a few goals I would like to reach in life. My main goal in life is to become a successful person and to teach others the importance of education by becoming a teacher. As a teacher, you create the foundation for your students upon which they will build the rest of their lives. My second goal in life is to make my family proud of me. Although my brothers joined the military, I will be the first child that has attended any college. My father has motivated and taught me to strive for excellence. Growing up with only my father there put a strain on him. I watched him raise three children on his on and struggle day to day trying to balance work, school, and taking care of us. One thing he has showed me through life is you can never give up. Currently, I do not have any children of my own but someday I hope I will and I can provide them with a wonderful life because of my success. I do not ever want to worry about how I am going to provide for them. I want my children to grow knowing that they have someone that they can look up to and be proud of. I already feel a sense of accomplishment just by taking the step in enrolling in Ashford University. I love knowing that one day my life will have more structure than what it is now, and that is a wonderful feeling.
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