When I Knew You Analysis
BACK WHEN I KNEW YOU presents with an excellent concept. The tone is reminiscent of an Alfred Hitchcock film or a Twilight Zone episode. The concept skillfully takes an ordinary couple and places them in an extraordinary situation.
The goal is clear and the stakes are high. The tone is foreboding and ominous, perfect for the plot. One can easily envision this as a film. While there are elements that can be further clarified, overall the script delivers a tense thriller.
The script offers the core characters harrowing moral choices. One wrong choice made for the right reasons spirals out of control. The characters are placed in an insurmountable situation and there seems no way out.
The script does an excellent job of intensifying the stakes …show more content…
It would be interesting if she were. She would have a clear motivation – she doesn’t want to share the energy, but this subplot doesn’t feel like it’s fully realized (if intended).
In the script, Susan is knocked out about three times, making this feel redundant. In fact, on page 73 when Michael pushes her, it seems rather harsh.
It’s not clear why Susan speaks in Spanish.
Clarify some rules. Susan has gone back 70 years – but does this mean she’s using the energy from the other people and why would she still exist if she’s only in her 50’s.
Clarify on page 75 the accusation about being in bed with another man and that he wasn’t Susan’s only lover. It’s unclear if he’s referring to the gardener or not.
The dialogue sounds a bit repetitive on page 80 about fault and blame.
If they both went back 150 years, clarify why Susan doesn’t also vanish when the box is destroyed.
Stan’s motivation at the end is not clear. He says: “God has my box,” but one isn’t sure what this really means. Clarify more of what or who Stan is and his connection to the house.
The ending with Gabe is rather anti-climactic. One feels like there’s a need to have a stronger ending with another twist.
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The goal is clear and the stakes are high. The tone is foreboding and ominous, perfect for the plot. One can easily envision this as a film. While there are elements that can be further clarified, overall the script delivers a tense thriller.
The script offers the core characters harrowing moral choices. One wrong choice made for the right reasons spirals out of control. The characters are placed in an insurmountable situation and there seems no way out.
The script does an excellent job of intensifying the stakes …show more content…
It would be interesting if she were. She would have a clear motivation – she doesn’t want to share the energy, but this subplot doesn’t feel like it’s fully realized (if intended).
In the script, Susan is knocked out about three times, making this feel redundant. In fact, on page 73 when Michael pushes her, it seems rather harsh.
It’s not clear why Susan speaks in Spanish.
Clarify some rules. Susan has gone back 70 years – but does this mean she’s using the energy from the other people and why would she still exist if she’s only in her 50’s.
Clarify on page 75 the accusation about being in bed with another man and that he wasn’t Susan’s only lover. It’s unclear if he’s referring to the gardener or not.
The dialogue sounds a bit repetitive on page 80 about fault and blame.
If they both went back 150 years, clarify why Susan doesn’t also vanish when the box is destroyed.
Stan’s motivation at the end is not clear. He says: “God has my box,” but one isn’t sure what this really means. Clarify more of what or who Stan is and his connection to the house.
The ending with Gabe is rather anti-climactic. One feels like there’s a need to have a stronger ending with another twist.
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