Argumentative Paragraph English 1 
Technology makes people distracted?
Paul A. Colón Cotto
University of Puerto Rico in Bayamon
English 3201
Prof. Davieliz Villafañe Colón
December 1, 2014
Brainstorming Box:
1. Is controlling me.
2. Im abusing of her.
3. Places when is not suppost to use it.
4. A help for me.
5. The thought of some scientists.
6. We having the key on our hand to change this situation.
7. Me filling identified with the topic.
Technology makes people distracted?
The reason of picking this topic is because I fill identified. This theme of technology making people more distracted, are making me taking more awareness, bacause this thing is taking me all my attraction and ignore other more important things. I am counter of using technology on places which should not be, but in my case is irresistible. Part by choosing this theme was for you as teacher and a student tell me what I need to do for a better results. Many scientific understood that increasing technology is has been something big in story but part of it have been a perdition for many. So it need to be a limit to the technology in kind of places. But is not definitive proof that technology is taking over our lives, it all depends on our capacity of self control. I think that the learning capacity is in ours hands and you have the tool to use it do good or bad cause. For this and others things I fill to pick this topic and the way I fill identified.
Peer Evaluation Section:
Giancarlos Casillas (Friend)
1. It’s clear the topic sentence but need to work a little bit on that.
2. Yes.
3. Yes.
4. Yes.
5. Yes.
6. No.
7. Yes.
8. If there are more sources that think the same of you.
9. It is a good paragraph and having this problem is situation that many young people are having and I understand you. I agree.
José A. Nieves Morales (Friend)
1. Yes, I could identify the topic sentence.
2. Yes.
3. Yes it have.
4. Is ok but considered more clarity on words.
5. Yes.
6. No.
7. Yes.
Paul A. Colón Cotto
University of Puerto Rico in Bayamon
English 3201
Prof. Davieliz Villafañe Colón
December 1, 2014
Brainstorming Box:
1. Is controlling me.
2. Im abusing of her.
3. Places when is not suppost to use it.
4. A help for me.
5. The thought of some scientists.
6. We having the key on our hand to change this situation.
7. Me filling identified with the topic.
Technology makes people distracted?
The reason of picking this topic is because I fill identified. This theme of technology making people more distracted, are making me taking more awareness, bacause this thing is taking me all my attraction and ignore other more important things. I am counter of using technology on places which should not be, but in my case is irresistible. Part by choosing this theme was for you as teacher and a student tell me what I need to do for a better results. Many scientific understood that increasing technology is has been something big in story but part of it have been a perdition for many. So it need to be a limit to the technology in kind of places. But is not definitive proof that technology is taking over our lives, it all depends on our capacity of self control. I think that the learning capacity is in ours hands and you have the tool to use it do good or bad cause. For this and others things I fill to pick this topic and the way I fill identified.
Peer Evaluation Section:
Giancarlos Casillas (Friend)
1. It’s clear the topic sentence but need to work a little bit on that.
2. Yes.
3. Yes.
4. Yes.
5. Yes.
6. No.
7. Yes.
8. If there are more sources that think the same of you.
9. It is a good paragraph and having this problem is situation that many young people are having and I understand you. I agree.
José A. Nieves Morales (Friend)
1. Yes, I could identify the topic sentence.
2. Yes.
3. Yes it have.
4. Is ok but considered more clarity on words.
5. Yes.
6. No.
7. Yes.