Conceptual Framework Of Piety Glory

After meeting with Dr. Loebenberg, it came to my attention that my argument to the relationship of piety, glory, and moral responsibility lacked a conceptual framework. This framework should have addressed the relationship and provided a “backbone” to the argument that would create an effective platform for reasoning. The idea behind the conceptual framework should have been an overarching concept that supported my argument: Glory received by pious mortals and their interactions with their Gods served as an incentive to be piety in their society. My paper’s argument follows up with a declaration of this relationship and the result: a lower level of free will. Due to the increased involvement of a divine authority, the moral responsibility of
pious mortals must shift towards those who command them-their Gods.

Prior to attending my grading conference with Dr. Loebenberg, I thought that the area of content would be the weakest due to the obscurity of my argument and whether or not another individual would understand it. I had my paper reviewed in the Barrett Writing Center before the grading conference and the reader did not have as much difficulty as I thought they would but they pinpointed specific areas where I could add more explanatory details and methods to improve clarity within my analysis especially in my last body paragraph. In my grading conference, it was noticeable that as the rest of my body paragraphs had improved in content and clarity, my introduction’s thesis and layout of propositions were floundering in a lack of clarity. I attempted to remedy this by heeding the advice of Dr. Loebenberg and clarifying my propositions, refining my thesis and roadmap, and removing unnecessary “throat-clearing” sentences.

Utilizing the knowledge I gained from my grading conference and Writing Center review, I plan on focusing on creating a clear and definitive thesis and three propositions first and foremost. Only after doing so, I will proceed to outline the rest of my essay. I also hope to attend at least one meeting with Dr. Loebenberg during her office hours to review my essay before the due date.