Green Bay Packers Vs. Detroit Lions
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Last year the Green Bay Packers won the super bowl championship, while the Detroit Lions didn't even make it to the playoffs. This would send out the message to any football fans that …show more content…
Because what many don't realize is that the Green Bay Packers and the Detroit Lions share many characteristics that make them great [Writing suggestion: "great" is an overworked word, too frequently seen, and too vague. It has too many meanings: huge, superior, numerous, etc. Use a more specific adjective] teams; but their differences are what accounts for their rankings.
The three biggest comparisons between the two teams is [Insert "that"] they both have two good young quarterbacks, two good head coaches and good wide receiving group.
Aaron Rodgers of the Packers is already a star and one of the best at his position, while Matthew Stafford of the Lions is a rising star and quickly becoming one of the top quarterbacks in the NFL [Unless this is on the title page or in an in-text citation, spell out the full name before first use of an acronym] . Aaron Rodgers is having [Writing suggestion: the present progressive "is having" is an awkward phrase; use the present tense--simply "has," "have," or "is to have"] a season for the …show more content…
Mike McCarthy got his first chance at being [Doctoral rule (but good advice for any academic writer)--If not a noun (as in "human being"), the word "Being" is hard to imagine; it means "existing." Try to rewrite this without using "being"--with action words like "attending," "working," "living," "experiencing," simply "as"--or even removing "being" completely] a head coach in 2006 from the Packers after years of being a assistant coaches. He has done a great job and has the Packers on a successful path. Having a talented quarterback like Aaron Rodgers lets Mike McCarthy do what he does best which is to call the best offensive plays in the NFL as he is one of the best offensive minds in the game. Jim Schwartz got his first chance to be a head coach with the Lions after years of being a assistant coach himself. The first thing he wanted to do as a head coach was to to [Typographical error: eliminate duplicate word (if on the same line)] change the losing culture that the Lions have been used to the past decade and turn them [Check pronoun agreement--if "them" refers to "coach" (or a singular subject), it should be singular, too (him or her)] into winners. He did accomplish that as a result the Lions have won 11 of their past 14 games.Jim [If not in a URL, leave a space after the period] Schwartz is a defensive minded coach and one of the best ones in the game.
Last year the Green Bay Packers won the super bowl championship, while the Detroit Lions didn't even make it to the playoffs. This would send out the message to any football fans that …show more content…
Because what many don't realize is that the Green Bay Packers and the Detroit Lions share many characteristics that make them great [Writing suggestion: "great" is an overworked word, too frequently seen, and too vague. It has too many meanings: huge, superior, numerous, etc. Use a more specific adjective] teams; but their differences are what accounts for their rankings.
The three biggest comparisons between the two teams is [Insert "that"] they both have two good young quarterbacks, two good head coaches and good wide receiving group.
Aaron Rodgers of the Packers is already a star and one of the best at his position, while Matthew Stafford of the Lions is a rising star and quickly becoming one of the top quarterbacks in the NFL [Unless this is on the title page or in an in-text citation, spell out the full name before first use of an acronym] . Aaron Rodgers is having [Writing suggestion: the present progressive "is having" is an awkward phrase; use the present tense--simply "has," "have," or "is to have"] a season for the …show more content…
Mike McCarthy got his first chance at being [Doctoral rule (but good advice for any academic writer)--If not a noun (as in "human being"), the word "Being" is hard to imagine; it means "existing." Try to rewrite this without using "being"--with action words like "attending," "working," "living," "experiencing," simply "as"--or even removing "being" completely] a head coach in 2006 from the Packers after years of being a assistant coaches. He has done a great job and has the Packers on a successful path. Having a talented quarterback like Aaron Rodgers lets Mike McCarthy do what he does best which is to call the best offensive plays in the NFL as he is one of the best offensive minds in the game. Jim Schwartz got his first chance to be a head coach with the Lions after years of being a assistant coach himself. The first thing he wanted to do as a head coach was to to [Typographical error: eliminate duplicate word (if on the same line)] change the losing culture that the Lions have been used to the past decade and turn them [Check pronoun agreement--if "them" refers to "coach" (or a singular subject), it should be singular, too (him or her)] into winners. He did accomplish that as a result the Lions have won 11 of their past 14 games.Jim [If not in a URL, leave a space after the period] Schwartz is a defensive minded coach and one of the best ones in the game.