Hunter's Run-On Sentences
As expected, food becomes a motif in this short story and one Hunter begins to use mostly in her run-on sentences. And as the story continues, it’s important to note that this pattern of several sentence paragraphs and paragraphs made up of run-on sentences continues. On page 28, right after a paragraph with several clear sentences, Hunter uses an abundance of nouns and adjectives in run-on sentences. One part of the section reads, “ Could I pick up some laundry detergent he asks, could I also pick up some beer, something for dinner, dessert, breakfast, lunch for the rest of the week, juice.” The protagonist is on the phone with her husband and it is interesting to look at how she decides to tell readers what she has heard. This is probably
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The section reads, “What are you watching? I ask him. The History Channel, he says, but I know better, I hear the childlike yelling of those anime cartoons he loves, I know he is at half-chub and doesn’t want to talk about it, I hang up over him saying, And some string cheese” (26). This example reminds me much of the first story with Peggy Paula. We have a run-on, but it becomes alive with the details that happen to be humorous adjectives: the childlike yelling, anime cartoons, her husband sitting on the couch in half-chub. This is how the protagonist envisions her husband-- the image created in a hurry because that is all she has time to think of as her husband rattles off his needs. The run-on also shows us all that is supposed to be shown. The contradiction of this thought is peculiar because although it’s a run-on, there are no extra details. In other words, the sentence goes on for longer than expected, but the details do not. It almost makes this section not seem like a run-on. Much of this is because we feel aligned with what the narrator is thinking and this conversation between husband and wife seems common, yet Hunter does not present it this way. She finds a way to bring humor to it and a realness with the way the details and happenings unfold
The section reads, “What are you watching? I ask him. The History Channel, he says, but I know better, I hear the childlike yelling of those anime cartoons he loves, I know he is at half-chub and doesn’t want to talk about it, I hang up over him saying, And some string cheese” (26). This example reminds me much of the first story with Peggy Paula. We have a run-on, but it becomes alive with the details that happen to be humorous adjectives: the childlike yelling, anime cartoons, her husband sitting on the couch in half-chub. This is how the protagonist envisions her husband-- the image created in a hurry because that is all she has time to think of as her husband rattles off his needs. The run-on also shows us all that is supposed to be shown. The contradiction of this thought is peculiar because although it’s a run-on, there are no extra details. In other words, the sentence goes on for longer than expected, but the details do not. It almost makes this section not seem like a run-on. Much of this is because we feel aligned with what the narrator is thinking and this conversation between husband and wife seems common, yet Hunter does not present it this way. She finds a way to bring humor to it and a realness with the way the details and happenings unfold