Lost In America Rhetorical Analysis

The analysis I made was based on Douglas McGray’s article “Lost in America”. You did a great job mentioning where the article can be found and giving a brief summary of the article at the beginning. It helps the reader understand the main points of the article. However, you started your introduction with “Douglas McGray, in Lost in America”, which is a very common attention-grabber. Unfortunately, because of its frequent usage, it becomes boring or less interesting to readers. You should try to start in a more creative way like a statement meant to surprise or amuse readers. The strategies you used to address the thesis statement was not very effective since your paper lack’s a purpose and you did not specify the audience. Also, it would be
Also, you did a great work relating the quotes with the explanation you offered. You did the same in your second and third paragraph, connected your ideas with the author’s ideas, explained and exemplified using quotes from the text. Your explanation on the analysis of the rhetorical choices is well-done, however you did not connect it back to the author’s purpose. Try to explain how the chosen rhetorical choice is effective in helping the author reach his audience and purpose. Additionally, I would suggest you to explain how the author’s rhetorical strategy works; it would definitely make your analysis more complete.
I also recommend you to identify the rhetorical device at the topic sentence of each paragraph of the rhetorical analyze being analyzed. Your use of quotations and in-text citation is on point but commas separating the author’s name and the page number are not used in MLA format. Your conclusion is also on point. You provided very strong and concise claims to disprove the author’s arguments.
Overall, your paper is well organized and concise. I suggest you to revise some small errors throughout the paper and focus a little more on specifying the author’s intended audience and