Malcolm X Research Paper Outline
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Joseph Sandig
Mooney
ENG1123
12 September 2014
The Life, Struggle, and Legacy of Malcolm X
Thesis: By looking at Malcolm X’s childhood and early life, incarceration and conversion to
Comment [r1]: Too much space at times. All should be double spaced only.
Islam, and subsequent world travels, one will come to realize that he is definitely one of the most intriguing and controversial figures of the 20 th century.
I.
II.
Comment [r2]: Great thesis and essay map!
Introduction
Malcolm’s childhood, teenage years, and life of crime
Comment [r3]: Again, you are spacing way too much through here.
A. Early childhood and struggles of growing up in Michigan
1. Father killed by the Klan and his mother sent to a state hospital
2. …show more content…
Middle school years and living with a white family
B. Moving to Boston and then to Harlem, NY
Comment [r4]: Your subject headings are a bit large; shorten these down.
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1.
Introduction to the nightlife scene in Boston
2. Life of a hustler in Harlem and burglary in Boston
III.
Incarceration for the burglaries, conversion to Islam, and spreading the message of Elijah
Muhammad
A. Transformation in prison
1. Reginald tells Malcolm about Elijah Muhammad and the Nation of Islam
2. Education and growth of faith
B. Post-prison life
1. Spreading Elijah Muhammad’s message and championing the Nation of Islam
2. Leaving the Nation of Islam
IV.
The pilgrimage to Mecca
A. Pilgrimage to Mecca
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1. Men of all color united through a devotion to Islam
2. Traveling throughout Africa
B. Returning to the United States
1. New perspective on the race issue
2. Lasting devotion to brotherhood and human rights
V.
Conclusion
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Comment [r5]: No need to repeat heading.
Joseph Sandig
Mooney
ENG1123
Research Paper
28 September 2014
The Life, Struggle, and Legacy of Malcolm X
Most people don’t do not know what to think when they hear the name Malcolm X. The reason for that is because his legacy is largely overshadowed by Dr. Martin Luther King Jr., the revered Christian minister and champion of civil rights. It’s It is not difficult to understand why
Comment [r6]: Do not use
contractions.
Dr. King’s philosophy of love and acceptance was acceptedreceived. America was founded on
Judeo-Christian principles; and anyone who says otherwise, doesn’t does not have a good grasp on history or the founding fathers of the United States. With that said, it is easy to see why
Malcolm X, a street hustler turned Muslim minister, was lambasted by the American media.
Whether it was right for that to happen is not within my knowledge to decide or even speculate on. Regardless, Malcolm’s spirit continues to live in the minds of everyone who has sought out his message. By looking at Malcolm X’s childhood and early life, incarceration and conversion
Comment [r7]: Yes it is! This is what your paper is for! You are to research and receive enough knowledge to make your own argument.
to Islam, and subsequent world travels, one will come to realize that he is definitely one of the most intriguing and controversial figures of the 20 th century.
Comment [r8]: Great thesis and essay map!
Malcolm X was born Malcolm Little in Omaha, Nebraska. However, his family would move to and eventually settle in Michigan to escape the Ku Klux Klan. Malcolm’s father, a
Baptist minister and follower of Marcus Garvey, was murdered by Klan members. Malcolm
Comment [r9]: Who is Marcus Garvey? Tell us briefly here.
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would share a similar fate except the only difference being that Malcolm was murdered by
Negros (Epps, web). The death of Malcolm’s father was a critical point in his life because he saw how it affected his mother and how the government treated her when they had to go on
Comment [r10]: This should be the page number if available. If no page, then just give
(Epps).
Comment [r11]: How old was he?
welfare to survive. The white welfare men were basically trying to take her kids away from her and alienate them from their roots, ultimately creating another black family dependent on the white power structure to live. Malcolm was made to feel subconsciously inferior from his childhood. He saw the white power structure and how it put his mother in a mental institution, a woman he loved and revered. Anyone can see how this trauma would lead him to fight against
Comment [r12]: Space 2 times after each period. the government and firmly believe that the “enemy is the white man” (Haley 256). Many may find that statement offensive and maybe even ignorant;, but to Malcolm, it was fundamental truth. Truth that was inside his mind and probably that he didn’t did not fully realize until he
Comment [r13]: Best not to end and begin consecutive sentences with the same word phrase.
found the religion of Islam and turned away from his life of hustling in Harlem. To better understand his anger, one would really have to understand his connection to his mother. The white power structure destroyed her mentally and that is something that never faded from his
Comment [r14]: How so? Elaborate.
mind. As Malcolm said in his autobiography, “I have no mercy or compassion in me for a society that will crush people, and then penalize them for not being able to stand up under the weight” (Haley 22). America created Malcolm and then had the nerve to look down on him for standing up for himself.
Since Malcolm’s mother had to be institutionalized, Malcolm was sent to live with a white Christian family. Malcolm said in his autobiography that the white family, although
Christian, would use the term “nigger” very freely and as though he wasn’t was not there (Haley
27). This kind of disregard for the feelings of others would lead Malcolm down a road of selfhatred as a dark-skinned individual. Even at school, he was treated differently because of the
Comment [r15]: Excellent writing and explanation throughout!
Comment [r16]: How old was he here?
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color of his skin, so this would lead Malcolm to believe that the white man subconsciously thinks he is better than his black counterpart (Haley 28). Some may argue that belief is ignorant; and for the most part it may be, but many others would argue that he was speaking fundamental truth that the world so desperately needed at the time. A major change in Malcolm’s teenage years came when he told his English teacher about his future plans of becoming a lawyer since
Lansing, Michigan, had no Negro lawyers. Malcolm’s teacher, Mr. Ostrowski, replied to this by telling him that a lawyer is “no realistic goal for a nigger” and that he should try carpentry
(Haley 38). This racist sentiment from his teacher is really what pushed Malcolm into a destructive life of hustling and drug dealing. Malcolm knew he was smarter than most of the students in his grade, but somehow his dream of being a lawyer was being brushed off by some racist teacher as unrealistic. Malcolm wasn’t was not the same at school or even around the
Comment [r17]: Do not use contractions.
white family he had lived with because of this which eventually resulted in him moving to
Comment [r18]: This what? Be specific.
Boston to live with his sister Ella (
Comment [r19]: Missing citation to back up this info! This is a form of plagiarism. Remember, even if reworded completely, you must still provide a citation that documents where the info you are discussing originated.
).
Malcolm moved to Boston with his sister Ella because he had great admiration for her strength, and living with his older sister likelyprobably really kind of gave him a mother like figure in his life. Ella treated him well, cooking meals for him and such, ; however, Malcolm
Comment [r20]: Too colloquial/conversational.
started doing his own thing by going into the more exciting side of Roxbury, the ghetto section.
Malcolm really started hanging around the wrong crowd of people . The peoplewhom he observed in the ghetto section; they really seemed cool to him at the time. Malcolm would see
Comment [r21]: Run-on/unclear phrasing.
mixed couples walking up and down the sidewalk and drinking in brightly colored neon bars.
All of this was leading up into Malcolm’s life of hustling. Things would change when Malcolm
Comment [r22]: You’ve mentioned this many times, but what do you mean, “hustling?”
would meet his good friend Shorty, a man he would eventually wind up going to jail with,
Comment [r23]: What would change?
because this. This was when he would get his first job shining shoes at the Roseland state
Comment [r24]: What does “this” refer to? Be more specific.
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ballroom where people would go to dance. All these things were leading Malcolm deeper into self-hatred because, at one point, he got his friend Shorty to “conk” his hair so that it would look
Comment [r25]: Define “conk?”
more like a white man’s hair. He later would admit that this sort of activity was “mutilation” and that he had “joined the multitude of Negro men and women in America who are brainwashed into believing that black people are inferior and white people are superior” (Haley 56-57).
Comment [r26]: Best not to end on a quote.
Finish the point and discuss the quote a bit before beginning the next paragraph/point.
Malcolm’s life of crime really took off when he went to the big cities like Detroit and
Harlem, and he started doing illegal jobs such as robberies and stick-ups. His life of crime was probably most likely rooted in his decision to join the nightlife scene. Malcolm made friends in the nightlife;, they were shady friends, but they were still his friends. This would lead him to become friends with more shady individuals, obviously leading him into a life where he had to sell drugs to make it. Malcolm would become a street hustler named Detroit Red due to his red conk. Later on, he would get into an organized crime group with his friend Shorty and two white women. He got caught because he went to pick up a stolen watch he brought to a jewelry shop; and little did he know, that the jewelers were one step ahead of him. A cop was waiting for him at the jewelry shop; and once Malcolm surrendered his gun that he carried, the officer arrested him and later, his friend and the two white women were picked up. Malcolm and Shorty got arrestedthe book thrown at them for involving white women in their gang (Haley 151-153).
While incarcerated for the burglaries, Malcolm would hit rock bottom. The other inmates in his cellblock even gave him the nickname “Satan” because he was so fervently antireligious
(Haley 156). Everything changed when Malcolm came to find the religion of Islam, particularly the teachings of Elijah Muhammad through his brother Reginald. His beliefs, even though they were dogmatic in nature, were what really gave him a purpose and empowered him to believe in the potential of his fellow Negros. Malcolm believed that Christianity was the religion of the
Comment [r27]: Too colloquial/conversational in tone.
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white man used to keep his brothers and sisters in a state of slavery. Malcolm did have good, well thought out arguments against Christianity. Ultimately, Christianity obviously has a dark past that many Christians don’t do not like to talk about, including the conquests of white
Europeans on the Holy Land where they labeled the ones that were against them “heathen” or
“pagan” and proceeded to conquer them (Haley 180). He fought hard for his beliefs while he was in prison by debating other inmates and educating himself through reading. Once released,
Malcolm went to live with his brother Reginald and Reginald’s wife Hilda. While living there with Reginald, Malcolm was introduced to a traditional Muslim lifestyle and became familiar with the customs. Reginald would fall away from the faith due to a falling out with Elijah
Muhammad, however, Malcolm remained. Malcolm fought hard for Elijah Muhammad because he strongly believed in his message of empowering the American Negro.
Malcolm fought everyday preaching against the “devil white man” (Haley 216). He firmly believed that Elijah Muhammad was a prophet sent from God. Everything would change, though, when he would come to find out that Elijah Muhammad was having affairs with his female secretaries. This turbulence would result in Malcolm leaving the Nation of Islam in 1964 to form his own organization. Someone might ask how Malcolm could depart with the man he believed to be a prophet sent from God. There’s There is no real solid answer to that question.
All that can be said is that Malcolm was always evolving. Even he himself said, “My whole life has been a chronology of changes” (qtd. in Remnick, web). In the same year, Malcolm would go on a pilgrimage to Mecca which would change his beliefs toward brotherhood in a huge way.
Malcolm saw men of every race and ethnicity united under a devotion to Islam. Malcolm was treated with great respect when he traveled throughout Africa, and people came from all over to hear him speak at different universities. Traveling the world really changed Malcolm for the
Comment [r28]: When your source did not say the actual quote, you must tell us the original speaker at the beginning of the quote. Then, in parenthesis, add qtd. in (meaning quoted in) before the source. See my changes in your paper.
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better because he was able to see outside the box and realize that not all people were as narrow minded as the average American (
).
Comment [r29]: Citation of proof needed.
Malcolm X is definitely one of the most interesting people of the 20 th century. In my honest opinion, Malcolm seemed to bewas a very intuitive person. He fought for what he knew in his heart was right, and I really believe he did the world a favor by expressing his disdain for the sins of the American government. Even Dr. King, with all his rhetoric of love and acceptance, came to realize that the American government is a deceitful organization. King saw the Vietnam War and firmly believed that it was the “enemy of the poor”, and the world definitely heard his message due to him winning the Nobel Peace Prize (Serrano, web). I firmly believe that Malcolm’s legacy is that of strength through truth. Like Malcolm famously said,
“Nobody can give you freedom. Nobody can give you equality or justice or anything. If you’re a man, you take it” (“Malcolm X legacyLegacy”). , web).
Works Cited
Comment [r30]: Too much space through here; all should be double spaced only.
Epps, Archie. “Malcolm X: Courage and Violent Death.” The Harvard Crimson. n.p., 3 Mar.
1965. Web. 6. Sept. 2014
Haley, Alex, and Malcolm X. The Autobiography of Malcolm X. New York: Random House,
1999. Print.
“Malcolm X Llegacy Still Resonates Today.” USAtoday. Gannett Company, Inc. 19 May 2005.
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Web. 6 Sept. 2014.
Remnick, David. “This American Life: The Making and Remaking of Malcolm X.” The New
Yorker. Condé Nast. , 25 Apr. 2011. Web. 3 Sept. 2014.
Serrano, Jed. “The X Factor: How Malcolm X internationalized the Civil Rights Movement.”
Student Pulse: The International Student Journal 2.4 (2010): 1-2. Web. 3 Sept. 2014.
Joseph,
Your research and your explanation of your research are excellent. As for your writing, I am very pleased. Nice job!
This is a good start! There are, however, some things we still must work on improving, in particular, in our use of citations which is an essential skill to learn for college writing. Thus, to ensure success in college and to improve your writing/citing skills, it is essential that we study the comments/corrections in this graded paper closely. For further help, be sure to reflect back on our notes and student example essays in our Canvas shell. Finally, because of their similarities in use of research, quotes, and citations, be sure to apply what you learn from this graded essay in the writing/editing of your
Analysis Essay. Last Tips: Be sure to use NetTutor and our tutors in the learning lab on campus for the next essay if you see that you need 1 on 1 extra assistance. Not only will this improve your paper, but you will also receive +5 points for doing this and providing me proof. Also, be sure to take advantage of the option I have given you to turn in your Analysis
Essay early to check for accidental plagiarism. If it comes back plagiarized, review the paper and make all necessary corrections before resubmitting it by the deadline.
GRADE:
85 / B
Comment [r31]: Should not be italicized.
Joseph Sandig
Mooney
ENG1123
12 September 2014
The Life, Struggle, and Legacy of Malcolm X
Thesis: By looking at Malcolm X’s childhood and early life, incarceration and conversion to
Comment [r1]: Too much space at times. All should be double spaced only.
Islam, and subsequent world travels, one will come to realize that he is definitely one of the most intriguing and controversial figures of the 20 th century.
I.
II.
Comment [r2]: Great thesis and essay map!
Introduction
Malcolm’s childhood, teenage years, and life of crime
Comment [r3]: Again, you are spacing way too much through here.
A. Early childhood and struggles of growing up in Michigan
1. Father killed by the Klan and his mother sent to a state hospital
2. …show more content…
Middle school years and living with a white family
B. Moving to Boston and then to Harlem, NY
Comment [r4]: Your subject headings are a bit large; shorten these down.
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1.
Introduction to the nightlife scene in Boston
2. Life of a hustler in Harlem and burglary in Boston
III.
Incarceration for the burglaries, conversion to Islam, and spreading the message of Elijah
Muhammad
A. Transformation in prison
1. Reginald tells Malcolm about Elijah Muhammad and the Nation of Islam
2. Education and growth of faith
B. Post-prison life
1. Spreading Elijah Muhammad’s message and championing the Nation of Islam
2. Leaving the Nation of Islam
IV.
The pilgrimage to Mecca
A. Pilgrimage to Mecca
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1. Men of all color united through a devotion to Islam
2. Traveling throughout Africa
B. Returning to the United States
1. New perspective on the race issue
2. Lasting devotion to brotherhood and human rights
V.
Conclusion
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Comment [r5]: No need to repeat heading.
Joseph Sandig
Mooney
ENG1123
Research Paper
28 September 2014
The Life, Struggle, and Legacy of Malcolm X
Most people don’t do not know what to think when they hear the name Malcolm X. The reason for that is because his legacy is largely overshadowed by Dr. Martin Luther King Jr., the revered Christian minister and champion of civil rights. It’s It is not difficult to understand why
Comment [r6]: Do not use
contractions.
Dr. King’s philosophy of love and acceptance was acceptedreceived. America was founded on
Judeo-Christian principles; and anyone who says otherwise, doesn’t does not have a good grasp on history or the founding fathers of the United States. With that said, it is easy to see why
Malcolm X, a street hustler turned Muslim minister, was lambasted by the American media.
Whether it was right for that to happen is not within my knowledge to decide or even speculate on. Regardless, Malcolm’s spirit continues to live in the minds of everyone who has sought out his message. By looking at Malcolm X’s childhood and early life, incarceration and conversion
Comment [r7]: Yes it is! This is what your paper is for! You are to research and receive enough knowledge to make your own argument.
to Islam, and subsequent world travels, one will come to realize that he is definitely one of the most intriguing and controversial figures of the 20 th century.
Comment [r8]: Great thesis and essay map!
Malcolm X was born Malcolm Little in Omaha, Nebraska. However, his family would move to and eventually settle in Michigan to escape the Ku Klux Klan. Malcolm’s father, a
Baptist minister and follower of Marcus Garvey, was murdered by Klan members. Malcolm
Comment [r9]: Who is Marcus Garvey? Tell us briefly here.
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would share a similar fate except the only difference being that Malcolm was murdered by
Negros (Epps, web). The death of Malcolm’s father was a critical point in his life because he saw how it affected his mother and how the government treated her when they had to go on
Comment [r10]: This should be the page number if available. If no page, then just give
(Epps).
Comment [r11]: How old was he?
welfare to survive. The white welfare men were basically trying to take her kids away from her and alienate them from their roots, ultimately creating another black family dependent on the white power structure to live. Malcolm was made to feel subconsciously inferior from his childhood. He saw the white power structure and how it put his mother in a mental institution, a woman he loved and revered. Anyone can see how this trauma would lead him to fight against
Comment [r12]: Space 2 times after each period. the government and firmly believe that the “enemy is the white man” (Haley 256). Many may find that statement offensive and maybe even ignorant;, but to Malcolm, it was fundamental truth. Truth that was inside his mind and probably that he didn’t did not fully realize until he
Comment [r13]: Best not to end and begin consecutive sentences with the same word phrase.
found the religion of Islam and turned away from his life of hustling in Harlem. To better understand his anger, one would really have to understand his connection to his mother. The white power structure destroyed her mentally and that is something that never faded from his
Comment [r14]: How so? Elaborate.
mind. As Malcolm said in his autobiography, “I have no mercy or compassion in me for a society that will crush people, and then penalize them for not being able to stand up under the weight” (Haley 22). America created Malcolm and then had the nerve to look down on him for standing up for himself.
Since Malcolm’s mother had to be institutionalized, Malcolm was sent to live with a white Christian family. Malcolm said in his autobiography that the white family, although
Christian, would use the term “nigger” very freely and as though he wasn’t was not there (Haley
27). This kind of disregard for the feelings of others would lead Malcolm down a road of selfhatred as a dark-skinned individual. Even at school, he was treated differently because of the
Comment [r15]: Excellent writing and explanation throughout!
Comment [r16]: How old was he here?
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color of his skin, so this would lead Malcolm to believe that the white man subconsciously thinks he is better than his black counterpart (Haley 28). Some may argue that belief is ignorant; and for the most part it may be, but many others would argue that he was speaking fundamental truth that the world so desperately needed at the time. A major change in Malcolm’s teenage years came when he told his English teacher about his future plans of becoming a lawyer since
Lansing, Michigan, had no Negro lawyers. Malcolm’s teacher, Mr. Ostrowski, replied to this by telling him that a lawyer is “no realistic goal for a nigger” and that he should try carpentry
(Haley 38). This racist sentiment from his teacher is really what pushed Malcolm into a destructive life of hustling and drug dealing. Malcolm knew he was smarter than most of the students in his grade, but somehow his dream of being a lawyer was being brushed off by some racist teacher as unrealistic. Malcolm wasn’t was not the same at school or even around the
Comment [r17]: Do not use contractions.
white family he had lived with because of this which eventually resulted in him moving to
Comment [r18]: This what? Be specific.
Boston to live with his sister Ella (
Comment [r19]: Missing citation to back up this info! This is a form of plagiarism. Remember, even if reworded completely, you must still provide a citation that documents where the info you are discussing originated.
).
Malcolm moved to Boston with his sister Ella because he had great admiration for her strength, and living with his older sister likelyprobably really kind of gave him a mother like figure in his life. Ella treated him well, cooking meals for him and such, ; however, Malcolm
Comment [r20]: Too colloquial/conversational.
started doing his own thing by going into the more exciting side of Roxbury, the ghetto section.
Malcolm really started hanging around the wrong crowd of people . The peoplewhom he observed in the ghetto section; they really seemed cool to him at the time. Malcolm would see
Comment [r21]: Run-on/unclear phrasing.
mixed couples walking up and down the sidewalk and drinking in brightly colored neon bars.
All of this was leading up into Malcolm’s life of hustling. Things would change when Malcolm
Comment [r22]: You’ve mentioned this many times, but what do you mean, “hustling?”
would meet his good friend Shorty, a man he would eventually wind up going to jail with,
Comment [r23]: What would change?
because this. This was when he would get his first job shining shoes at the Roseland state
Comment [r24]: What does “this” refer to? Be more specific.
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ballroom where people would go to dance. All these things were leading Malcolm deeper into self-hatred because, at one point, he got his friend Shorty to “conk” his hair so that it would look
Comment [r25]: Define “conk?”
more like a white man’s hair. He later would admit that this sort of activity was “mutilation” and that he had “joined the multitude of Negro men and women in America who are brainwashed into believing that black people are inferior and white people are superior” (Haley 56-57).
Comment [r26]: Best not to end on a quote.
Finish the point and discuss the quote a bit before beginning the next paragraph/point.
Malcolm’s life of crime really took off when he went to the big cities like Detroit and
Harlem, and he started doing illegal jobs such as robberies and stick-ups. His life of crime was probably most likely rooted in his decision to join the nightlife scene. Malcolm made friends in the nightlife;, they were shady friends, but they were still his friends. This would lead him to become friends with more shady individuals, obviously leading him into a life where he had to sell drugs to make it. Malcolm would become a street hustler named Detroit Red due to his red conk. Later on, he would get into an organized crime group with his friend Shorty and two white women. He got caught because he went to pick up a stolen watch he brought to a jewelry shop; and little did he know, that the jewelers were one step ahead of him. A cop was waiting for him at the jewelry shop; and once Malcolm surrendered his gun that he carried, the officer arrested him and later, his friend and the two white women were picked up. Malcolm and Shorty got arrestedthe book thrown at them for involving white women in their gang (Haley 151-153).
While incarcerated for the burglaries, Malcolm would hit rock bottom. The other inmates in his cellblock even gave him the nickname “Satan” because he was so fervently antireligious
(Haley 156). Everything changed when Malcolm came to find the religion of Islam, particularly the teachings of Elijah Muhammad through his brother Reginald. His beliefs, even though they were dogmatic in nature, were what really gave him a purpose and empowered him to believe in the potential of his fellow Negros. Malcolm believed that Christianity was the religion of the
Comment [r27]: Too colloquial/conversational in tone.
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white man used to keep his brothers and sisters in a state of slavery. Malcolm did have good, well thought out arguments against Christianity. Ultimately, Christianity obviously has a dark past that many Christians don’t do not like to talk about, including the conquests of white
Europeans on the Holy Land where they labeled the ones that were against them “heathen” or
“pagan” and proceeded to conquer them (Haley 180). He fought hard for his beliefs while he was in prison by debating other inmates and educating himself through reading. Once released,
Malcolm went to live with his brother Reginald and Reginald’s wife Hilda. While living there with Reginald, Malcolm was introduced to a traditional Muslim lifestyle and became familiar with the customs. Reginald would fall away from the faith due to a falling out with Elijah
Muhammad, however, Malcolm remained. Malcolm fought hard for Elijah Muhammad because he strongly believed in his message of empowering the American Negro.
Malcolm fought everyday preaching against the “devil white man” (Haley 216). He firmly believed that Elijah Muhammad was a prophet sent from God. Everything would change, though, when he would come to find out that Elijah Muhammad was having affairs with his female secretaries. This turbulence would result in Malcolm leaving the Nation of Islam in 1964 to form his own organization. Someone might ask how Malcolm could depart with the man he believed to be a prophet sent from God. There’s There is no real solid answer to that question.
All that can be said is that Malcolm was always evolving. Even he himself said, “My whole life has been a chronology of changes” (qtd. in Remnick, web). In the same year, Malcolm would go on a pilgrimage to Mecca which would change his beliefs toward brotherhood in a huge way.
Malcolm saw men of every race and ethnicity united under a devotion to Islam. Malcolm was treated with great respect when he traveled throughout Africa, and people came from all over to hear him speak at different universities. Traveling the world really changed Malcolm for the
Comment [r28]: When your source did not say the actual quote, you must tell us the original speaker at the beginning of the quote. Then, in parenthesis, add qtd. in (meaning quoted in) before the source. See my changes in your paper.
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better because he was able to see outside the box and realize that not all people were as narrow minded as the average American (
).
Comment [r29]: Citation of proof needed.
Malcolm X is definitely one of the most interesting people of the 20 th century. In my honest opinion, Malcolm seemed to bewas a very intuitive person. He fought for what he knew in his heart was right, and I really believe he did the world a favor by expressing his disdain for the sins of the American government. Even Dr. King, with all his rhetoric of love and acceptance, came to realize that the American government is a deceitful organization. King saw the Vietnam War and firmly believed that it was the “enemy of the poor”, and the world definitely heard his message due to him winning the Nobel Peace Prize (Serrano, web). I firmly believe that Malcolm’s legacy is that of strength through truth. Like Malcolm famously said,
“Nobody can give you freedom. Nobody can give you equality or justice or anything. If you’re a man, you take it” (“Malcolm X legacyLegacy”). , web).
Works Cited
Comment [r30]: Too much space through here; all should be double spaced only.
Epps, Archie. “Malcolm X: Courage and Violent Death.” The Harvard Crimson. n.p., 3 Mar.
1965. Web. 6. Sept. 2014
Haley, Alex, and Malcolm X. The Autobiography of Malcolm X. New York: Random House,
1999. Print.
“Malcolm X Llegacy Still Resonates Today.” USAtoday. Gannett Company, Inc. 19 May 2005.
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Web. 6 Sept. 2014.
Remnick, David. “This American Life: The Making and Remaking of Malcolm X.” The New
Yorker. Condé Nast. , 25 Apr. 2011. Web. 3 Sept. 2014.
Serrano, Jed. “The X Factor: How Malcolm X internationalized the Civil Rights Movement.”
Student Pulse: The International Student Journal 2.4 (2010): 1-2. Web. 3 Sept. 2014.
Joseph,
Your research and your explanation of your research are excellent. As for your writing, I am very pleased. Nice job!
This is a good start! There are, however, some things we still must work on improving, in particular, in our use of citations which is an essential skill to learn for college writing. Thus, to ensure success in college and to improve your writing/citing skills, it is essential that we study the comments/corrections in this graded paper closely. For further help, be sure to reflect back on our notes and student example essays in our Canvas shell. Finally, because of their similarities in use of research, quotes, and citations, be sure to apply what you learn from this graded essay in the writing/editing of your
Analysis Essay. Last Tips: Be sure to use NetTutor and our tutors in the learning lab on campus for the next essay if you see that you need 1 on 1 extra assistance. Not only will this improve your paper, but you will also receive +5 points for doing this and providing me proof. Also, be sure to take advantage of the option I have given you to turn in your Analysis
Essay early to check for accidental plagiarism. If it comes back plagiarized, review the paper and make all necessary corrections before resubmitting it by the deadline.
GRADE:
85 / B
Comment [r31]: Should not be italicized.