My Journaling Journal Analysis

Sarah,
I really enjoyed reading your journal this week. What first caught my attention was the way that you introduced your journaling topic. I thought that the introduction was funny and it showed a little bit of your voice as a writer, all while introducing your topic. I also liked how you described your family traditions. I felt that you described them in such a way that the reader could feel a sense of your and your family's personalities. Finally, I liked reading about this topic in general. I think it was a good idea, and it was in no way boring to read.
Of course, along with the great things about your journal, I did notice a couple of things that you co of course of could improve on. Maybe editing a little bit more carefully in terms
of grammar could help you out. One thing in specific I noticed that reoccurred a few times throughout your journal was that you did not put a comma in front of your FANBOYS. Even more specific than that, there were a couple of “so’s” that were missing a comma. These were just minor mistakes though. Overall, you should be proud of this journal. I really enjoyed reading, like I said before. Keep up the good work!