The Millennial Shift: Drastic Changes in the Work Force
Memo To: Mrs. Davis
From: Preston Collum
Date: September 15, 2012
Subject: Reflections about Draft 1, Rhetorical Analysis Essay
This paper is a literacy memoir about reading in my life. It shows how I went from being a “good” reader to a not so good reader, and how one soccer practice made me look at it from a different view. This paper is very different than any other writing because it is in first person. I have not done a paper in first person in many years, but it was nice to be able to write something about that is about your own life. Every paper that we have done in class has been in third person. It was challenging to make this on in first person. I liked that I could write about an event in my life. However, I was not really sure of how it was going to turn out.
Although my introduction was good, this paper had a variety of mistakes. As I was looking over the paper and seeing what was written from peer review day, I realized that there were a lot of careless mistakes. I looked at both the review from the first and the second drafts to see if I had missed anything. One comment from my reviewer was that I had a lot of repetition. I saw that this paper was very repetitive. I went through and hopefully corrected all of those errors. The font on my paper was not in any form of being right. I am pretty sure that this time I have it right. There were also some punctuation errors that I saw and corrected. I am hoping that I have proofread this paper enough to catch any mistakes that I made in the previous draft.
Even though this paper was about me, it was challenging to write. It took some time to get my thoughts together to write the paper. I also had a hard time getting my thoughts and memories about it onto the paper. After I started writing, my thoughts began to flow. I feel that this paper is much better than the previous one.
I hope that the feedback that I get on this draft is better than the one from the previous
From: Preston Collum
Date: September 15, 2012
Subject: Reflections about Draft 1, Rhetorical Analysis Essay
This paper is a literacy memoir about reading in my life. It shows how I went from being a “good” reader to a not so good reader, and how one soccer practice made me look at it from a different view. This paper is very different than any other writing because it is in first person. I have not done a paper in first person in many years, but it was nice to be able to write something about that is about your own life. Every paper that we have done in class has been in third person. It was challenging to make this on in first person. I liked that I could write about an event in my life. However, I was not really sure of how it was going to turn out.
Although my introduction was good, this paper had a variety of mistakes. As I was looking over the paper and seeing what was written from peer review day, I realized that there were a lot of careless mistakes. I looked at both the review from the first and the second drafts to see if I had missed anything. One comment from my reviewer was that I had a lot of repetition. I saw that this paper was very repetitive. I went through and hopefully corrected all of those errors. The font on my paper was not in any form of being right. I am pretty sure that this time I have it right. There were also some punctuation errors that I saw and corrected. I am hoping that I have proofread this paper enough to catch any mistakes that I made in the previous draft.
Even though this paper was about me, it was challenging to write. It took some time to get my thoughts together to write the paper. I also had a hard time getting my thoughts and memories about it onto the paper. After I started writing, my thoughts began to flow. I feel that this paper is much better than the previous one.
I hope that the feedback that I get on this draft is better than the one from the previous
Cited: * "The "Millennials" Are Coming." CBSNews. CBS Interactive, 11 Feb. 2009. Web. 14 Sept. 2012. <http://www.cbsnews.com/2100-18560_162-3475200.html>.