Peeking In Line 17
In line 2 Blanco uses the word ‘peeking’ to describe the sun rising in the morning. I would change this word to the word ‘peering’ just to make it seem a little more overpowering. Blanco uses the word ‘teeming’ in line 12 to describe the silver trucks carrying oil, paper, or milk. I would change this word to ‘brimming’ so it sound like it’s overflowing the brim of the highway. The word ‘blackboard’ in line 17 is used when Blanco is talking about the lessons for the day. ‘Whiteboard’ is the word I would change blackboard to just to make it a little more modern. ‘Rooting’ in line 27 in used to describe the ground rooting us. I would change this word to embedding so that it sounds like its really effecting us deeply. And lastly, in line 29 the
word ‘gleaning’ is used to talk about our hands collecting coal. I would use the word ‘culling’ instead because it means to pick out for reason and I think it would be a better word choice since you would be picking coal out for a reason. The dictionary/thesaurus helped me in making these choices about what words to change by allowing me to look up the exact meaning of the word I wanted to change and find a synonym that I thought would fit better.
word ‘gleaning’ is used to talk about our hands collecting coal. I would use the word ‘culling’ instead because it means to pick out for reason and I think it would be a better word choice since you would be picking coal out for a reason. The dictionary/thesaurus helped me in making these choices about what words to change by allowing me to look up the exact meaning of the word I wanted to change and find a synonym that I thought would fit better.