Woods ENGL 111 84 WP2 Final Draft
Dear Carly, The beginning process of writing this paper was a very intimidating process for me. But with your help and the help of one of my peers, I think I’ve come a long way with the quality and formatting of my essay. My peer suggested that I use in text citations. Once I researched this to be sure it was necessary, I reviewed my paper and made these adjustments to the best of my understanding. She also pointed out that my thesis statement did not describe the effectiveness of the authors’ rhetorical device. I would not have caught this error otherwise. I expanded my thesis statement to better describe this effectiveness. In both of my feed backs it was mentioned that I didn’t have a strong conclusion. So by restructuring my final paragraph this allowed me to expand in my conclusion. Adding to it a final prospective on Kate Harding’s story. After reviewing your comments on my paper, I had a new found confidence in this writing process. The grammar and sentence structures you mentioned where an easy fix. Also with your help and the help of google, I FINALLY figured out how to use the hanging indent feature in my Word program. Though I did struggle while trying to avoid summarizing the text. This was difficult for me because I feel that I need to tell the points in the story that I am about to analysis. This is something that I know I can continue to improve on once I get a better grasp on analyzing texts.
Thank you for your help,
Brittany
Brittany Woods
Carly Smith
English Composition (ENGL 111-84N)
24 February 2015 Kate Harding’s “How I Bluffed My Way through College” was published on Salon.com in April of 2011. This online magazine consists of reviews and articles about modern day life. Including but not limited to books, films, music, technology and relationships. Harding’s story is more of a “tell all” about her college experience. The academic struggles she was forced to work through. The social barrier she had built. And the broken
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Barry, Ben. “Blogger, author, fat-acceptance activist KATE HARDING.” Chatelaine. Nov 2009. EBSCOhost. 15 Feb 2015.
Soapbox.Inc. The Source for Feminism. Web. 15 Feb 2015