Describe A Discourse Community

As for the value of summary and synthesis, I think they are pretty good, but they might just need a bit more elaboration. For example, in the first paragraph discussing about Gee’s article, you state that it “also describes what a discourse community is and defines its characteristics” (Dobias 7), but I feel that in order to dive deep into the article and reach the heart of it, you might also want to say how Gee describes a discourse community. You could say that his article “also describes a discourse community as any group of people that uses a discourse when communicating amongst its members, providing several characteristics to identify it.” You don’t have to go into full detail, but I think that you should explain more of the main ideas of
You used a perfect blend between a formal and informal word choice, and it works because your intended audience consists of community leaders, particularly for small organizations. You don’t need to sound extremely formal and professional, but you also have to establish and maintain your credibility as a researcher on your subject, and I feel that you found the right balance between formality and informality. However, there are a few instances where I think that being a bit more formal would make your sentences better. In the seventh sentence of your fourteenth paragraph, you mention the “cool part of being a community leader” (Dobias 7), and I might just be nitpicking, but I believe that the sentence would improve if you replaced “cool” with “best,” making it “the best part of being a community leader.” My other suggestions for revision are about the first two sentences of your seventeenth paragraph, where I advise you to remove “like it or not” (Dobias 8) from the first sentence. For the second sentence, I think you should either remove the phrase “Because of that” (Dobias 8) and begin it with “You,” or replace that phrase with “As a