Flash Science Fiction Genre Badge Analysis
Flash Science Fiction Genre Badge
Signatures
LP/Guide___________________________
MS__________Ethan______________________
MS__________Law______________________
Badge Requirements:
At least two of the three Pre-writing challenges.
One critique and your final greenlighted submission.
Lead at least one Between the Lines (BTL) discussion of a Mentor Text for every three Genre or Three Draft Badge, including the Mentor Text you critiqued, your critique of that text and the Socratic questions and launch you used in your discussion. (You may also add a video of the session captured by the studio video system.) Each BTL must have at least four other participants and receive a rating of 7.5 of higher. I did not do this.
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Although that was good, also in the beginning you had two sentences in a row when it said “Branson, enraged”, try to change that. I also loved the part when the police were chasing you character. The amount of verbs you injected into those sentences made them more descriptive than if you hadn't put any in. Again, it made it seem like you were the one running, which is a very powerful thing in writing.
Specific Adjectives and Adverbs:
You used these pretty sparingly. For me, this is the hardest thing. I love describing things in detail, but for this, I can not do that. It looks like you can though! You do not go into super detail when you put your descriptive words in, but where they are, Your adjectives and adverbs are strong and descriptive. I really enjoyed your descriptive words in the first page. They really showed the scene. How he got chased down and caught. I also liked the end and the fight, but you could have described the main character’s death a lot more, to make it seem more dramatic and scary.
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4 using a unique approach/technique to explore a topic You did a somewhat unique approach in your writing.
5 using a thoughtful balance of showing and telling skills: You did a great job of using a balance of showing and telling skills you really painted a picture in my mind.
5 choosing interesting, high-quality details You definitely chose a lot of interesting high-quality details in your piece.
5 using action words to enhance descriptions You used a lot of action words that got my attention and spiced up the story.
Trait #2: Organization
5 crafting a title that makes you want to read and it accurately describes the piece Your title was very interesting and got me hooked from the beginning.
4 beginning with a strong introduction Your introduction was not excellent but it hooked me and got me
Signatures
LP/Guide___________________________
MS__________Ethan______________________
MS__________Law______________________
Badge Requirements:
At least two of the three Pre-writing challenges.
One critique and your final greenlighted submission.
Lead at least one Between the Lines (BTL) discussion of a Mentor Text for every three Genre or Three Draft Badge, including the Mentor Text you critiqued, your critique of that text and the Socratic questions and launch you used in your discussion. (You may also add a video of the session captured by the studio video system.) Each BTL must have at least four other participants and receive a rating of 7.5 of higher. I did not do this.
For each Genre or Three …show more content…
Although that was good, also in the beginning you had two sentences in a row when it said “Branson, enraged”, try to change that. I also loved the part when the police were chasing you character. The amount of verbs you injected into those sentences made them more descriptive than if you hadn't put any in. Again, it made it seem like you were the one running, which is a very powerful thing in writing.
Specific Adjectives and Adverbs:
You used these pretty sparingly. For me, this is the hardest thing. I love describing things in detail, but for this, I can not do that. It looks like you can though! You do not go into super detail when you put your descriptive words in, but where they are, Your adjectives and adverbs are strong and descriptive. I really enjoyed your descriptive words in the first page. They really showed the scene. How he got chased down and caught. I also liked the end and the fight, but you could have described the main character’s death a lot more, to make it seem more dramatic and scary.
Few …show more content…
4 using a unique approach/technique to explore a topic You did a somewhat unique approach in your writing.
5 using a thoughtful balance of showing and telling skills: You did a great job of using a balance of showing and telling skills you really painted a picture in my mind.
5 choosing interesting, high-quality details You definitely chose a lot of interesting high-quality details in your piece.
5 using action words to enhance descriptions You used a lot of action words that got my attention and spiced up the story.
Trait #2: Organization
5 crafting a title that makes you want to read and it accurately describes the piece Your title was very interesting and got me hooked from the beginning.
4 beginning with a strong introduction Your introduction was not excellent but it hooked me and got me