The argumentative essay “A Downward Spiral of Earth’s Marine Ecosystems” the author
The argumentative essay “A Downward Spiral of Earth’s Marine Ecosystems” the author
When reading the students paper, I found numerous mistakes that he had made. He wrote the paper about the dark knight and, in my opinion, it was a good movie. I think that, first of all, I would have to say he tends to use a lot of commas in the in the second paragraph. In which he could have broken it down into a few sentences, rather than one sentence. Another time is in the third paragraph where he rapidly names of the actors and actresses. He could have spaced them out and said a little bit about the characters. I would change this because it would give the paper more character and would be more appealing with the different character that is in it and how good they were. I also think that the writer could have written a better conclusion paragraph. He only has one real sentence in it and the other sentence was only four words. I would have taken all of the information that I explained in all the other paragraphs and just summarized them up. I would have made the paragraph at least a minimum of three or four long sentences.…
Essay does not synthesize the argument, evidence, analysis of documents, and context into a coherent and persuasive essay by accomplishing items listed in the 1…
Believing in one’s self is common, and it thrives throughout the novel, Freak the Mighty, by Rodman Philbrick, and the poem, “Ability,” by Selina E. Matis. There are several lines in the poem, “Ability,” that relate to the novel, Freak the Mighty.…
Ed Yong's article, "Scared to Death", describes how returning wolves to Yellowstone affected the elk population's patterns and behaviors. Many people believe that the fear of being eaten is what drives animals away. However, this theory is not completely true. The Yellowstone elk population was thriving, but the wolves' return impacted it on many different levels.…
1. It is important that an essay not be a series of quotes or paraphrased material; one’s own analysis must be part of the essay. How can you create a balance between your own analysis and the source material?…
I would say this essay needs to improve on it's structure by providing more rhetorical appeals rather than one to get the attention of reader more…
a. The strengths of 2A are that the writer use very strong, concise language to get their point across. They included quotes and even outside knowledge that contributed to the argument. There are very few weaknesses in this essay. In 2B, the language and vocabulary are not as strong as in 2A. However this essay is still adequate and covers the topics needing to be covered, but not as well as 2A. The author of 2B also discusses football players and partiers in a very stereotypical way, which is just as bad as stereotyping nerds, and I don’t think Fridman intended the readers to think like that. In 2C the writer seems to be rushed and there are many spelling and grammar mistakes. The paragraphs do not seem to flow together and there are many run on sentences. The writer did make good points in their essay but, there were too many mistakes that overruled the good.…
If the police suspect that a home contains marijuana, they must first obtain a search warrant under the Fourth Amendment, unless there are exigent circumstances such as destruction of evidence, hot pursuit, or some other exception that applies.…
Hamlet is telling the players not to overdo their acting, not to be more like Herod than Herod himself. Also whoever was playing a role in the play, he would have them whipped if they overdid their part…
Another essential element of an essay is unity and coherence. This means that the author should keep the topic of the essay on one idea and keep sentences and paragraphs flowing in the right direction. Davids, although keeps the essay on one topic, fails to have effective paragraph and sentence flow. David creates weak flow between paragraphs two and three especially, and also between paragraphs four and five. Paragraphs should flow gently into one another, but in the examples given above, Davids jumps from topic to topic, making it difficult for the reader to follow. Instead of going from the topic of children’s safety to the fact that many children dislike school; Davids should create a transition sentence at the end of…
I feel that the argument in this essay is pretty effective towards the public audience. I feel that if the political audience were to read it they would need a little more evidence in order for the author to swing them. The police can just make comebacks saying that are only a few events that have happened; although, the author does address a statistic that a police officer stated dealing…
Police work is dangerous. Sometimes police put in situations that excessive force is needed. But, because some officers use these extreme measures in situations when it is not, police brutality should be addressed. The use of excessive force may or may not be large problem, but it should be looked into by both the police and the public.…
Key Issues/Main Ideas: In my essay about Police Brutality I will discuss many different topics and key issues. I plan on discussing all of these topics in detail in the essay but for this proposal I will briefly describe my key issues and main ideas. To begin my essay, I will give the definition of Police brutality. Many people have an unclear idea as what Police brutality really means. Then I will talk about the civil rights movement and police brutality, which will include the riots in Birmingham Alabama. Rodney King will be next and how this incident opened the eyes of main stream Americans that police officers are not always right. I think it is also a vital part of this essay to include the causes and triggers of police brutality. Next I will go into racial and ethnic minorities and discuss how police brutality targets people of minority race and/or the ethnically diverse. Then I will discuss the repercussions of the corrupt police on the rest of the police force including an interview I will have with a police officer on his views and opinions on this subject. In the last few paragraphs I plan on explaining local police brutality cases and prove that police brutality happens with our own local police right here in Denver. Lastly I will give information on a particular organization that specializes in giving support to surviving victims of police brutality dealing with mental or physical damage due to Police brutality. After obtaining…
Police work is dangerous. Sometimes police put in situations that excessive force is needed. But, because some officers use these extreme measures in situations when it is not, police brutality occurs. I believe Police brutality needs to be addressed, because it affects every one of us within our society. How can we trust the Police officers who sworn to “serve the public” when they use such excessive force that results in homicide?…
The study in police culture started many decades ago in the United States and the United Kingdom. The study offered a wealth of material through observation and analysis that contributed to the formation of theories of police culture. In this study, the focus will be on analyzing police culture that will include the significance of stress in policing. It will also analyze the culture for women and ethnic minorities in policing and how they can achieve equality in law enforcement. In addition to examining the culture we will describe the internal and external mechanisms that control police discretion.…