The paper sounded as if a robot wrote it and, there was very little creativity or explanation of my thoughts. First, I changed one of my sources that would stronger support my claim, and it allowed me to cite the speaker. As a result, I was able to explain my thoughts better which would benefit any reader to understand my paper. Secondly, I used higher vocabulary words and more transitional words. This allowed my revised writing to seem more natural and have better flow. I have gained more high vocabulary words since the beginning of the school year that I am proud to use. Lastly, I added a concluding paragraph because I did not have once in my first writing. I recognized that my writing didn’t sound complete without summarizing all of the evidence to support my claim. In the end, I have gained more ways to deal with the process of writing such as revising, using transitional words, using high vocabulary, and including a concluding paragraph at the end of my
The paper sounded as if a robot wrote it and, there was very little creativity or explanation of my thoughts. First, I changed one of my sources that would stronger support my claim, and it allowed me to cite the speaker. As a result, I was able to explain my thoughts better which would benefit any reader to understand my paper. Secondly, I used higher vocabulary words and more transitional words. This allowed my revised writing to seem more natural and have better flow. I have gained more high vocabulary words since the beginning of the school year that I am proud to use. Lastly, I added a concluding paragraph because I did not have once in my first writing. I recognized that my writing didn’t sound complete without summarizing all of the evidence to support my claim. In the end, I have gained more ways to deal with the process of writing such as revising, using transitional words, using high vocabulary, and including a concluding paragraph at the end of my