Summary Of Judith Ortiz Cofer's 'Story Of My Body'

The assignment I chose to revise is my literary analysis of Judith Ortiz Cofers The Story of My Body. I have made some local, but mostly global revisions to the paper, as well as addressed some of the feedback made by the instructor. The local revisions include: making complete sentences, rearranging words. For global revisions, I rewrote the conclusion, broke a paragraph into two, and as suggested by the instructor I added more analysis and connection to the young girl.

In the first paragraph I started it with saying, “The ‘Story of My Body by Judith Ortiz Cofer.’”, which is not a complete sentence so I added the word “is”. I also wrapped up my first paragraph with a thesis statement that includes everything I analyzed. The sentence I added was “This all represents the fact that the expectation on Puerto Rican females hinders the young girls growth into a strong woman.” This sentence makes it more clear on what I am analyzing in all my findings.
This helped there have a break between point of view and then how the community influenced the young girl. I ended the second paragraph with “These actions probably made her feel like she was not good enough and how she had to look a certain way to fit in.” Concluding that the paragraph gave examples of her not being able to fit in. I then added the following sentence to the new third paragraph “The community the young girl lived in added to the problem of making her feel hopeless.” Letting the reader know that the main concentration of that paragraph was about the communities