Summary Of Stephi's Speech Overbulling

The speaker I chose to critique is a student giving a persuasive speech over bulling. The girl, Stephi, starts off strong by looking at the audience and giving a startling fact. She also speaks very clearly and projects so that everyone will hear her. She uses visual aids to show what she is saying, and it may leave a bigger impact. Stephi also gives a preview of her speech in the introduction and uses transition statements. Then to introduce the first point of her speech she returned to two questions in her introduction which was a nice tie in. That was Stephi did well though, but seeing as she is a high school student this may be her first speech.
While she started her speech off strong that quickly ended as she started talking to her paper. You could still understand her, but her eyes did not come off that page. This also showed that either she forgot what her speech was about or didn’t rehearse it because she was reading the paper word for word. Rehearse may have also help with her stumbling over words but it could be her nerves. I feel like she should have also switched her first two points, why one should care about
She talked about a woman who wrote an article for Rolling stone about 9 who committed suicide and then specifically a boy named Nick Lockwood. Suicide is a very horrible tragedy that affects many people, and for teens bulling is a huge cause for this. So I can see why Stephi included this in her point about why people should care about bullying. But all she said was he was bullied and died, this doesn’t really convey the tragedy that bulling caused. Since this information was from an article one would assume it would say more than this. She should have talk about the affects it had one his family and friends, talk about the bullying itself. To really pull the heartstrings and show the awful things a bully can cause and thus making people care about preventing something like this from happening