Taylor Hunts: A Formal Analysis
Hi Peg: Very few comments and very few corrections—mostly punctuation.
I have indicated them in red—see check marks in margin.
I would have made two simple changes in Taylor Hunts’ excerpt; however I figure it was a direct quote from his book.
Love mom
The Introduction
The three body types, or doshas, in Ayurveda are Vata, Pitta, and Kapha. Though we are [I would eliminate the word all here, but you don’t have to →] all made up of all three, a tendency towards one is common. This tendency can be further increased by our environment and most definitely, by what we eat. And why Ayurveda, like our yoga practice, recommends using opposing forces to keep us in balance – including eating foods that will pacify the dominant dosha.
Jen’s Piece:
I'm a high-functioning caretaker, or so my therapist tells me … so kind of interesting that I’m sitting in a therapist’s office in the first place. But here I am. Exhausted, overwhelmed and frequently in tears. Who was taking care of me? Because I sure wasn't.
You see, one of my ”skills” (apparently) is in doing too much and putting other people's needs ahead of my own far too often. Who knew this was a bad thing? I’m a Mysore teacher – I thought that was part of the job description. If being a chronic caretaker weren't therapy provoking enough, all of the changes I've gone through this year certainly …show more content…
I know it’s a bleak scene, but I’m happy here. I don’t care that I have no stuff. The other three apartments in the building are filled with sober friends and I know this is where I’m supposed to be right now. I cook some food and prepare to relax and process the stuff that just happened on my yoga mat. As I lay down, there is something weird going on in my body, and I don’t understand what it is but I am aware of every single scar on my arms, each place I stuck a needle. I can feel all the pain I caused myself and all of the damage that I did. I know I am in desperate need of more healing.
I have indicated them in red—see check marks in margin.
I would have made two simple changes in Taylor Hunts’ excerpt; however I figure it was a direct quote from his book.
Love mom
The Introduction
The three body types, or doshas, in Ayurveda are Vata, Pitta, and Kapha. Though we are [I would eliminate the word all here, but you don’t have to →] all made up of all three, a tendency towards one is common. This tendency can be further increased by our environment and most definitely, by what we eat. And why Ayurveda, like our yoga practice, recommends using opposing forces to keep us in balance – including eating foods that will pacify the dominant dosha.
Jen’s Piece:
I'm a high-functioning caretaker, or so my therapist tells me … so kind of interesting that I’m sitting in a therapist’s office in the first place. But here I am. Exhausted, overwhelmed and frequently in tears. Who was taking care of me? Because I sure wasn't.
You see, one of my ”skills” (apparently) is in doing too much and putting other people's needs ahead of my own far too often. Who knew this was a bad thing? I’m a Mysore teacher – I thought that was part of the job description. If being a chronic caretaker weren't therapy provoking enough, all of the changes I've gone through this year certainly …show more content…
I know it’s a bleak scene, but I’m happy here. I don’t care that I have no stuff. The other three apartments in the building are filled with sober friends and I know this is where I’m supposed to be right now. I cook some food and prepare to relax and process the stuff that just happened on my yoga mat. As I lay down, there is something weird going on in my body, and I don’t understand what it is but I am aware of every single scar on my arms, each place I stuck a needle. I can feel all the pain I caused myself and all of the damage that I did. I know I am in desperate need of more healing.